Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The supplied bar chart illustrates the proportion of pupils who select various subjects at a university in 2020 and 2025.
Overall, the percentage of student choosing arts flactuated in 2020 due to learner want to gain experience in this feild.While, in 2025, computer science became the extremely popular subject in whole feild therefore students secure addmission in this feild.
In 2020, learners got addmission in arts sector because it demand increase at that time approximately 45%. Computer science did not play a crucial role at university because its students ratio almost 20%.
In 2025, computer science was one of the major feild in whole university 45% students got addmission in this feild. Medicine sector one of the respective sector in university but its ratio was average 35%, trend of bussiness raise rapidly in 2025 round about 40% learner enrool this feild due to its demand boost at that time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student has failed to meet the word count requirement, falling just short at 149 words, which incurs a penalty under Task Achievement. Furthermore, there is a fundamental misinterpretation of the input data: the student describes the charts as depicting university subjects in 2020 and 2025, whereas the prompt clearly specifies British students speaking other languages in 2000 and 2010. Consequently, the information reported is entirely inaccurate regarding the actual prompt. Main features are not correctly identified or summarised. Based on these significant limitations in addressing the prompt correctly and the under-length penalty, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs with basic overall progression, utilizing some linking words such as 'Overall' and chronological markers like 'In 2020' and 'In 2025'. However, logical flow is frequently disrupted by confusing statements and awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, the use of pronouns and demonstratives without clear antecedents. Cohesive devices are used mechanically rather than flexibly. While there is a basic structure, the overall organization suffers due to the inaccuracies in content and repetitive sentence structures. This aligns best with the Band 5.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently revolving around words like 'sector', 'field', 'demand', and 'ratio'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'flactuated' for fluctuated, 'feild' for field, 'addmission' for admission, and 'bussiness' for business. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and incorrect forms ('enrool' instead of enrolled) cause strain for the reader. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a higher band, reflecting a Band 4.0 performance in Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors, including tense inconsistencies, missing prepositions, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'percentage of student choosing', 'its students ratio almost 20%', 'learner enrool this feild'). Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and comma splices, such as 'While, in 2025, computer science became the extremely popular subject...'. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to a Band 4.0.
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