Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
To see the diagram we tell me the percentage of brithish students to learn other languages in addition 2000 to 2010 or different durations.
.Let start to the discussion to see the diagram first of all no other languages is 30 percent ratio of the students to 2000.
.And secoudly French language the students spoken 15 percents and no have big rates
.And thirdly language is Germany is overall 10 percent to spoke students.
. Spanish language is 20 percent to speaking students in university to 2000.
. The part of languages is another is 15 percents.
. And finally the two other languages is 10 percent ratios of students.
The secondly discussed the diagrm to language rations in 2010.
. At first no other languages is 35 percent to able at British students.
. French is only ten percent to the measurements.
. And German language in 2010 is only 10 percent, in addition to Spanish is only 10 ratios, another language is 20 and two other languages is 15 percent of the British students in 2010
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 3.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the data provided in the charts regarding British students' language abilities in 2000 and 2010. However, the information is presented in a fragmented, list-like manner using bullet points rather than cohesive paragraphs. While the student mentions several figures for both years, such as '30 percent' for no other languages in 2000 and '35 percent' in 2010, the data presentation lacks a clear overall overview and misses key comparative features required by the task. Furthermore, some data points are slightly inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as 'language is Germany' and 'Spanish is only 10 ratios'. Because the response makes an attempt to report the main features for both years, it warrants a Band 4.5, reflecting a partial and minimally developed attempt at the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisational structure of the response is extremely weak. The student relies heavily on bullet points rather than standard essay paragraphs, which severely disrupts the flow and visual coherence of the text. Introductory and transitional phrases, such as 'To see the diagram we tell me' and 'The secondly discussed the diagrm', are highly unnatural and grammatically flawed. There is no clear logical progression or effective use of cohesive devices to link ideas together smoothly. Paragraphing is absent in the traditional sense, and referencing between sentences is faulty, making the text read as a disjointed list of random data points rather than a unified summary. Consequently, the response falls within the Band 4 descriptor for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used throughout the response is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'percent', 'students', 'languages', and 'ratio' without demonstrating a wider range of lexical items suitable for an academic task. There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'no have big rates', 'language is Germany is overall 10 percent to spoke students', and 'only 10 ratios'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'brithish' and 'secoudly'. While the basic meaning of individual percentages can sometimes be deciphered, the vocabulary is far too limited and inaccurate to support a higher band, aligning well with the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 3.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of poorly constructed simple sentences with frequent, severe errors. Complex structures are absent, and almost every sentence contains major grammatical flaws or word-order issues, such as 'To see the diagram we tell me the percentage of brithish students to learn other languages' and 'And German language in 2010 is only 10 percent, in addition to Spanish is only 10 ratios'. Verb forms, prepositions, and sentence boundaries are handled incorrectly throughout the text, often obscuring the intended meaning and placing a heavy burden on the reader. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 3.5, as errors are extremely frequent and impede basic communication in multiple instances.
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