Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the charts illustrates the proportions of british learner at one universty in england who were able to talk other language in addition to english in two diffrent years.
After analyzing it can be seen clearly thatin 2000 the 30 percent students no use other language in british universty it wasthe highest step.the spanish and french in british universty almost 20% and 15% was learner respectively.the another language in british universty was the half of no other language.whenener,the german and two other language was same in british univerty in 2000.
the diagrame further collect that in 2010 the no other language in british universty the students 5% increase.inaddition,two other language and another language aslo huge almost 5% in british universtycorspendingley
although,the german and french in 2010 also decrease 5% in students in universty.whilst,the spanish language students 10% fall in 2010 in british universty.
in conclusion,in 2000 the highest speakin language in british universty no other language,on the other hand in 2010 the other languge students5% increase and the lowest language in 2010 spanish,french and german in universty.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by summarising the two charts depicting the proportions of British students able to speak foreign languages in 2000 and 2010. While the student identifies several key features—such as the most popular category ('no other language') and references to specific percentages like Spanish and French—the data reporting contains several inaccuracies and confusion regarding the categories. For instance, stating that 'german and two other language was same' in 2000 misreads the chart data (German was 10%, two other languages was 10%, but the comparison and interpretation are clumsy). Furthermore, the overview lacks clarity and fails to present a clear, coherent summary of the overarching trends. Ideas are under-developed, and the response sits firmly at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
Paragraphing is attempted, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but the structure is weak and lacks logical progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'whenener', 'inaddition', and 'corspendingley'. There is a lack of smooth transitions between sentences, making the flow disjointed. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'the another language in british universty was the half of no other language'), and the overall progression of information is difficult to follow, which corresponds to Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is limited, repetitive, and heavily relies on lifting phrases directly from the prompt (e.g., 'british universty', 'proportions of british learner'). Word choice is frequently inaccurate, such as using 'talk other language' instead of 'speak other languages', or 'highest step' instead of 'largest proportion'. Spelling errors are prominent throughout the text, including 'universty', 'diffrent', 'diagrame', 'collect' (instead of indicate/illustrate), 'inaddition', and 'speakin'. The lexical range is minimally adequate for basic communication, earning a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed attempts at complex or comparative sentences. There is a total absence of correct subject-verb agreement in many places, such as 'the 30 percent students no use' and 'the german and french in 2010 also decrease'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing capitalisation at the start of sentences and after full stops, alongside run-on clauses. Errors are frequent and severe, often distorting meaning, which aligns with the Band 4 descriptors.
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