Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two pie charts shows the propertion of British and England students at one university in able to speak different language in addition to English, between 2000 and 2010.
Overall, No other language has the significantly spoken english laguage in British, whereas Germany was least percentage of other language used in British.
In 2000, No other language has the 30 percentage demand of british students able to speak language other than english whereas, 35 percentage of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 76 words and trailing off mid-sentence ('whereas, 35 percentage of'). Because of this severe under-length, the task cannot be fully addressed. While the student attempts to introduce the charts and mention some data points such as '30 percentage' for no other language in 2000, the content is too fragmentary, incomplete, and largely uninhibited by a proper overview or comprehensive comparison. The misinterpretation of the categories (e.g., treating German and 'no other language' awkwardly) further reduces the accuracy of the reporting. Due to the incomplete nature of the response and failure to meet word count rules, this criterion is severely impacted.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text contains a brief introduction and an attempt at an overview sentence ('Overall, No other language has the significantly spoken english laguage...'), but the logical progression breaks down rapidly. The response is far too short to establish effective paragraphing or cohesive structures. Cohesive devices are minimal and clumsy, and the abrupt end of the text leaves the ideas completely underdeveloped and disjointed. Referencing is unclear, and the overall structure lacks the progression expected in an Academic Task 1 response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and contains frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'propertion' instead of 'proportion' and 'significantly spoken english laguage'. The student attempts some task-specific terms like 'percentage' and 'university', but the overall lexical range is narrow and inadequate for an academic description. Communication is hindered by lexical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing throughout the short text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with noticeable errors present in almost every sentence. Examples include subject-verb and prepositional errors such as 'The two pie charts shows' (plural subject with singular verb) and 'at one university in able to speak'. Sentence structures are extremely limited and simplistic, and because the text trails off abruptly, it fails to demonstrate a reliable control of even basic sentence construction. Errors frequently strain understanding.
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