Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English ,in 2000 and 2010.

Lets start summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features 2000 ,the graph show the different signs to evaluate the information from the chart . 15% of British students able to speak language French than English in 2000 ,20 % of British students able to speak the Spanish language than English ,2000.10% German only British students able to speak the than English ,2000. 30% British students able to speak the no other languages only speak the English language. 15% persent british students able to speak the another languages only, than English. And 10% British studentd able to speak the two other languages ,2000.

Now i would like to talk about the % OF British students able to speak the languages other than English ,2010.In 2010 10% Spainsh and 10% French British students able to spaek than English . 10% German only and 15% two other language able to speak British students than English language . 35% no other language and 205 other language able to speak British students yhan English .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the two pie charts for 2000 and 2010. However, the candidate fails to follow standard Academic Task 1 conventions, such as writing an introductory overview and selecting and comparing main trends effectively. Instead, the response relies heavily on copying prompt wording and listing individual percentages mechanically. Furthermore, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data, such as misinterpreting the '205 other language' figure at the end of the text. Overall, the task is addressed only partially, leading to a Band 5.0 score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the response is weak and lacks a professional academic structure. The text begins with conversational meta-language ('Lets start summarise...') rather than an objective introduction. Paragraphing is minimal and poorly managed, with the second paragraph attempting to cover all of 2010 in a chaotic, unguided block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a lack of overall logical progression. Although the response is somewhat readable as a sequence of data points, it fails to achieve clear cohesion, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on phrases lifted directly from the prompt like 'British students able to speak other languages in addition to English'. There are numerous lexical errors, such as 'persent' instead of percent, 'Spainsh' instead of Spanish, and awkward collocations like 'spaek than English'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for a standard academic task, though the basic meaning of the numbers can generally be discerned. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains numerous basic errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'the graph show the different signs', 'British studentd able to speak'). Simple structures dominate, and attempts at more complex formulations are consistently faulty. Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced commas and missing periods disrupting the flow. Because errors are extremely frequent and often obscure the intended meaning, the response aligns with Band 4.0.

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