Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given circles graphs shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
In 2000, 30% of British students able to speak no other language.Moreover, spanish language 20% speak British students. Not only this, French and another language British childern spoke only 15% same. Moreover, British people learn two another languages at 10% and 10% spoke German language only.
On the other hand, in 2010, similarlly 10% of British students able to speak Spanish, French and German languages. Moreover, 15% two other laguages spoke British students. Not only this, British miners spoke 20% of another language. Moreover, 35% British students learn no other language.
In conclusion, in 2000 highest students were spoke no other language and lowest average of German and two other language. Moreover, in 2010, British students maximaum sopke no other language and minimum spoke Spanish, French and German language.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting data from the two pie charts for 2000 and 2010, covering key figures such as the percentages for Spanish, French, German, and no other language. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data (for instance, claiming 'British miners spoke 20% of another language' instead of general speakers/students, and misinterpreting several chart categories). The overview at the end attempts to capture the highest and lowest proportions, but it contains awkward phrasing and minor errors. The information presented is sometimes confusing or inaccurate regarding the source visual, placing it at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs for each year, and a concluding overview. However, the progression within paragraphs is severely hindered by awkward and repetitive cohesive devices, such as the excessive and unnatural use of 'Moreover' and 'Not only this'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences often read as disconnected lists of statistics rather than a cohesive summary of visual data. Paragraphing is attempted, but overall organization lacks smooth progression, justifying a Band 5.0 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that stem from direct translation or misuse of terms. Examples include 'circles graphs', 'British miners' (referring to students), and unnatural phrasing like 'maximaum sopke'. There is a very limited range of vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data, and spelling mistakes are present ('similarlly', 'maximaum'). These noticeable lexical limitations and errors place this criterion at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple, repetitive sentence patterns with frequent basic errors. Examples of severe grammatical inaccuracy include '30% of British students able to speak no other language' (missing verbs) and 'highest students were spoke no other language' (incorrect passive/active voice mixture). Punctuation and subject-verb agreement are frequently faulty, causing difficulty for the reader and fitting the Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors.
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