Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts show the porportion of british students at universty who were able to speak other languages in addition 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature.

In the diagram they are explained the british students were able to speak the spanish language in the year of 2000.The large amount of britsh students were able to speak the spanish language.They donot speak the english language.Only spanish language were spoken the british students.They donot speak the other language like french german and another language.They only able to speak the spanish language.

In the second diagram they are explained the british students were able to speak the spanish and french language in the year of 2010.The large amount of students were able to speak the french and spanish language .They donot speak the national language.They only speak to spanish and french language.They donot speak the other language like german italian and another language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by discussing the provided charts, but it severely misinterprets the data. For example, the student claims that students in 2000 'donot speak the english language' and 'Only spanish language were spoken', which is factually incorrect and misreads the category 'No other language' as speaking no English at all. Similarly, the data description is highly repetitive and misses key comparisons and accurate figures (such as the 30% and 35% with no other language). Consequently, the response only partially addresses the requirements of Task 1, earning a band score of 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the text is basic and repetitive, lacking clear overall progression. The writer uses simple transitional phrases like 'In the diagram' and 'In the second diagram', but paragraphing is poorly handled, including the bizarre inclusion of task instructions as a standalone sentence. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, and often inaccurate, while referencing (such as 'they are explained') is unnatural and frequently obscures meaning. This aligns with the descriptors for a band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and limited, relying heavily on words directly copied from the prompt such as 'british', 'students', 'languages', and 'spanish'. There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'porportion' instead of 'proportion' and 'universty' instead of 'university'. The range is insufficient to convey the data accurately, and repeated phrasing ('They donot speak the other language') heavily constrains the quality, resulting in a band score of 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that fail grammatically, such as 'In the diagram they are explained the british students were able...'. There are persistent punctuation and spacing errors throughout the text (e.g., missing spaces after periods), and basic verb form mistakes ('Only spanish language were spoken', 'They only able to speak'). Because errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.

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