Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustartes data on the ratio of British learners who have capicity to speak other languages inaddition to endlish.
As can be seen from the chart, acording to thhe student who speak only French, German, and Spanish in 2000 at total 45%, and who able to speak multiple lanuage is only 15% of British students and last who do not speak the other languages just 30% but they able to speak another languages to speak.
In 2010, the students was only able to speak only language was decreced by 15% overall and also who able to speak two language than english is that at fall by the 5% and who able to speak the another language is incresed by 5% and at the end who not able to sprak any lanuage is rocket up by the 5%.
From the chart,it can be seen that the higesh diffrence saw is 15 % of single languages and less decrese saw in other language and no other languages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the pie charts for 2000 and 2010. However, the data interpretation is severely confused, with inaccurate figures and garbled comparisons. For instance, the student states that single-language speakers in 2000 totaled 45%, and misinterprets various trends between the two years (e.g., claiming those able to speak another language increased by 5% and those with no other language rocketed up by 5%, which does not fully align with the provided data). The overview is weak and lacks a clear, coherent summary of the main features, falling well short of higher band descriptors. This corresponds to a band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas is difficult to follow due to poor sentence structure and weak cohesive devices. Sentences such as 'As can be seen from the chart, acording to thhe student who speak only...' run on with confusing referencing and lack logical flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. This places the response in the band 4.5 range for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'illustartes', 'capicity', 'inaddition', 'endlish', 'acording', 'thhe', 'lanuage', 'decreced', 'incresed', 'higesh', 'diffrence'). The range of vocabulary is limited, and word choices are often inappropriate or inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication and causes strain for the reader. This performance aligns with a band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most complex sentence attempts are severely flawed, containing multiple errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'the students was only able to speak only language was decreced', 'who able to speak two language than english is that at fall by the 5%'). Errors are extremely frequent and often distort the intended meaning, making it difficult for the reader to parse the exact data. This warrants a band 4.0.
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