Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the below given pie chart illustrate the propotions of british students at one university in england who speaks other languages in addition to english in particular year of 2000 and 2010.
To commence with the first pie chart iluustrate the students able to speak diffrent languages other then english in 2000. the chart shows most of students speaks only english . Spanish is the foriegn language mostly spoken by students followed by french . German and students speaking more then one language shares the same propotion thats the least in pie chart.
Furthermore other pie chart shows the distribution of british students speaking other language in year 2010.the pie chart shows that one quarterth of students not been able to speak other then english . spanish,german and french contributes same in the chart individually but combining them , the propotion is nearly same as students speaking only english. combining the students who can speak one or more then one language other then english is exactly same as students speaking only english in which students speaking more then one language dominates
to conclude in the given pie chart students speaking english top up the chart followed by students speaking spanish and french and least contribution is done by students speaking german.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the main features of the two pie charts illustrating the proportions of British students able to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010. However, the response contains several inaccurate data interpretations and misconceptions regarding the chart categories. For instance, the student states that 'German and students speaking more then one language shares the same propotion thats the least in pie chart', whereas the data shows German only at 10% and two other languages at 10% in 2000, but 'no other language' was 30% and another language was 15%. Furthermore, the description of proportions across the categories is often confused and vague, lacking precise data citation. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, which shows an attempt to structure the essay logically with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is weak and lacks clear logical links. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive (e.g., 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', 'to conclude'), and referencing is occasionally faulty, making it hard to follow the comparisons. Paragraphing is attempted but internal cohesion within sentences is weak due to poor punctuation and run-on sentences. This fits the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'propotions', 'british', 'england', 'speaks', 'iluustrate', 'diffrent', 'then', 'foriegn', 'quarterth', and 'spanish'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'distribution' and 'contributes', but inaccurate word choice and severe spelling issues impede communication in places. The range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, which corresponds to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student uses a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent grammatical errors. There are numerous punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the text (e.g., starting sentences with lower-case letters like 'the below given' and 'to commence with'). Subject-verb agreement errors are common, such as 'chart illustrate' and 'most of students speaks'. Attempts at complex sentences are faulty and lack control over basic grammar. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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