Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The charts bellow shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. we will dicuss this two charts whats changes are 2000 and 2010.
On the first hand, In 2000 british students no other language has highly percentage these percentage are 30%. and the german and two other language has less percentage these percentage are 10%.
on the other hand, In 2010 there has same no other language has highly percentage these percentage are 35%. and the less percentage are spanish,german and french these percentage is 10%. and the another language has been increase 15% to 20%. and two other language has been increased 10% to 15%.
in 2000 british students two others language has less and in 2010 british student two others language has been increased. no other language has many develop.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by reporting several figures from the two charts, such as the proportions for 'no other language' (30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010) and noting increases in 'another language' and 'two other languages'. However, the response falls short of a comprehensive overview. The opening contains conversational filler ("we will dicuss this two charts whats changes are 2000 and 2010") rather than a proper summary of main trends. Furthermore, some data reporting is imprecise or confusingly phrased, such as stating that spanish, german, and french all shared the lowest percentage of 10% in 2010. While some key features are identified, the lack of a clear, coherent overview and under-developed comparisons place this performance in the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the text is heavily compromised by poor paragraphing, informal conversational interjections, and a lack of logical progression. The response uses rudimentary transitional phrases like "On the first hand" (an incorrect blend of 'on the one hand' and 'firstly') and "on the other hand," but these do not effectively structure the comparison. Paragraphs are extremely short, consisting of isolated, choppy sentences that do not flow into one another. There is also a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly across sentences, resulting in a disjointed reading experience that fails to guide the reader through the data logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words provided in the prompt, such as "british students," "percentage," and language names. There are frequent lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as using "highly percentage" instead of "highest percentage" or "large proportion," and "develop" instead of 'development' or 'growth'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or awkward. The limited range of vocabulary makes it difficult for the writer to express precise meanings about statistical data, restricting the score in this category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences with frequent, basic errors. Examples of errors include subject-verb agreement issues ("The charts bellow shows"), incorrect prepositions and articles, and malformed sentence structures ("In 2010 there has same no other language has highly percentage"). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with lowercase letters beginning sentences. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader and demonstrate a lack of control over even basic grammatical forms.
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