Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In the comparison of 2000 the persons who spoke spanish is divided into spanish and french and german language are almost same.
In the year of 2000 the people who spoke the spanish is about 20 percent however in the year of 2010 spanish language is divided into its haif so in the year of 2010 the people who speak the english is only remain left 10 percent. In addition the french language is spoken by 15 percent in the year of 2000 but in the year of 2010 it decrease to 10 percent. Moreover the german language was spoke by 10 percent peoples which is also equal to those persons who can speak the two other language in the year of 2000 yet the people who speak german in the year of 2010 is about 15 percent. and the pepople who speak no other language is about 30 percent which is increase in the year o 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by reporting several figures from the charts, such as Spanish speakers at 20% in 2000 and 10% in 2010, alongside data for French, German, and those with no other language. However, the data reporting contains inaccuracies and confusion regarding the categories (for instance, misinterpreting the change in Spanish speakers as being 'divided into its haif' and stating 'the people who speak the english is only remain left 10 percent'). More importantly, the response completely lacks an overall summary or overview, which is a vital requirement for Academic Task 1. Because the ideas are underdeveloped and the information is partially misinterpreted, the task achievement is limited, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers from a lack of effective paragraphing and logical progression. It is written as a single, dense block of sentences that run together without clear structuring. While basic cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'however', and 'Moreover' are used to link sentences, referencing is often confusing or incorrect, such as 'the persons who spoke spanish is divided into spanish and french'. There is no clear overall structure or overarching comparison, leading to a mechanical and disjointed flow that hinders readability and overall cohesion, reflecting Band 4 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'people', 'speak', 'language', and percentages. There are several instances of awkward word choices and lexical inaccuracies, such as 'divided into its haif', 'remain left', and 'peoples'. Less common vocabulary is virtually absent, and spelling or word-form errors (e.g., 'spanish' not capitalized in places, 'pepople') occur throughout. The range is minimally adequate to convey basic data points, but the frequent errors and restricted vocabulary place this firmly in Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterized by numerous subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'the persons who spoke spanish is', 'the people who speak german... is about 15 percent'), awkward phrasing, and run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation. There is a very limited range of complex structures, and attempts at complexity often result in faulty syntax and distorted meaning (e.g., 'the german language was spoke by 10 percent peoples which is also equal to those persons who can speak the two other language in the year of 2000 yet the people who speak german in the year of 2010 is about 15 percent'). Frequent errors impede understanding, aligning with Band 4.
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