Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrates the percentage of British student at one university speaking different languages in addition to English over an ten years period of time between 2000 and 2010.
Overall the number of students speaking another language and no other language has been increased over the time , Meanwhile students who are speaking french and spanish other than english has been decreased ,In contrast Students speaking german language remained stable.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 70 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the student attempts an overview mentioning categories like no other language and French, the lack of detail, absence of specific data points from the charts (such as exact percentages), and extremely brief nature of the response prevent it from achieving a higher band score. To improve, the writer must ensure they write at least 150 words, incorporate specific numerical data from the visual aids, and provide a fully developed analysis of the main features and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The writing is divided into a brief introduction and an overview paragraph, which shows some basic structuring. However, overall progression is limited due to the brevity of the text. Cohesive devices are minimal, with phrases like 'Overall' and 'Meanwhile' used to link ideas, but punctuation errors (such as missing commas and spaces) disrupt the flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the text is too short to demonstrate sustained logical organisation or sophisticated cohesion management.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is very limited and basic, featuring repetitive vocabulary such as 'speaking', 'language', and 'students'. There are notable word choice and collocation issues, such as 'has been increased' instead of 'increased' and 'speaking french and spanish' rather than 'speakers of French and Spanish'. Spelling and mechanical errors also occur, such as 'student' instead of 'students' and 'an ten years period'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a very simple idea, it falls short of the precision needed for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. The writer attempts a complex structure with 'while students who are speaking...', but it is awkwardly phrased and inaccurate. There are multiple grammatical errors, including tense and voice misuse ('has been increased' and 'has been decreased' instead of the active past simple or present perfect intransitive forms), missing articles, and punctuation mistakes (unnecessary commas, multiple spaces). These errors, combined with the short length, restrict the grammatical score.
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