Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The piechart compares the percentage of british students who have ability to speak others langauge ( no other langauge, french only,german only, spanish only,another language, and two other language)rather than english in the period of 2000 and 2010.

overall,no others langauge were on large percentage among them. the number of students decrease who used to spoke french and spanish over period. another langauge and two langauge spoken learners were increased while german spoken remained constant.

In 2000, no others language means only english spoken students were on large amount accounted for 30. which have taken large proportion of the piechart it increased and madeup for 35 over 10 years. another langauge and two other language spoken taken palces as 15 and 10 respectively increased and recorded for

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 127 words and trailing off mid-sentence. While the student attempts an overview and selects some main features from the charts—such as identifying that students with no other language formed the largest group and increased over the decade—the incomplete nature of the response severely limits task completion. The data reporting is also disjointed, with incomplete descriptions of the categories. Because the response is unfinished, it cannot fully present a comprehensive overview or make all relevant comparisons as required by the task instructions. Consequently, this falls into the lower band categories due to under-length and incomplete development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into rudimentary paragraphs, including a brief introduction and an overview statement. However, the logical progression breaks down quickly, especially in the second body paragraph which trails off unfinished. Cohesive devices are very basic and mechanical, with repetitive structures used to link ideas (e.g., 'over period', 'while german spoken remained constant'). Furthermore, referencing is unclear in places, and the lack of a complete conclusion or final sentence disrupts the flow of information. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall structure is undermined by the premature ending of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic vocabulary and exact phrasing from the prompt (e.g., 'percentage of british students', 'languages other than english'). There are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'have ability to speak others langauge', 'decrease who used to spoke', and 'no others language means only english spoken students were on large amount'. Spelling errors are also present throughout the text, including 'piechart', 'british' (lowercase), 'langauge', 'others', 'german' (lowercase), and 'palces'. These lexical shortcomings reflect a basic vocabulary band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain severe structural errors. Examples include 'the number of students decrease who used to spoke french and spanish over period' and 'another langauge and two other language spoken taken palces as 15 and 10 respectively increased and recorded for'. There are persistent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, word order, and missing articles. Punctuation and capitalisation are also poorly handled. Because errors are frequent and often impede smooth communication, the grammar matches a Band 4.5 descriptor.

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