Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given pie chart illustrates the ratio of british students at one university in england who can speak other language than english. First and foremost is no other language in 2000 30%of people were knowing no other language whereas in 2010, the count of people knowing no other languages is 35% on the other hand, in 2000, 15% of people are familiar with french whereas in 2010 the count decreases by 5% and becomes 10% whereas in 2000, the count is 15%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student has failed to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, writing only 82 words, which severely impacts task completion. The response attempts to describe some features of the charts, such as the proportion of people with no other language (30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010) and French speakers (15% dropping to 10%), but it misses a comprehensive overview and fails to report all relevant main features and comparisons. Furthermore, the writing trails off incompletely at the end ('whereas in 2000, the count is 15%'). Because the task is only partially addressed and significantly under-length, it falls into Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, appearing as a single short block of text. Cohesion is very mechanical and repetitive, heavily relying on the word 'whereas' to link clauses, which results in run-on sentences and a lack of clear progression. For example, the sentence 'whereas in 2000, 15% of people are familiar with french whereas in 2010 the count decreases by 5% and becomes 10% whereas in 2000, the count is 15%' demonstrates poor organizational control and an abrupt, incomplete ending. Due to these significant organizational and cohesive shortcomings, the response aligns with Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring everyday terms like 'ratio', 'count', and 'people'. There are basic capitalization errors such as 'british', 'england', and 'french'. While the student manages to convey some numerical data accurately, the range of vocabulary is extremely limited and lacks the flexibility and precision required for Academic Task 1. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are absent, and word choices are overly simplistic, fitting the Band 4.0 description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures are basic and repetitive, characterized by heavy reliance on simple coordination and overly long, poorly controlled compound sentences joined by conjunctions. There are noticeable tense inconsistencies and errors, such as 'were knowing' instead of 'knew' or 'spoke', and a complete lack of punctuation like full stops in the middle of the response. The high frequency of grammatical and punctuation errors impedes readability and reflects Band 4.0 performance.
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