Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This chart illustrates proportions of Britain students at one university in Uk, where a lot of people are able to speak few languages as well as English between 2000 and 2010 while in the charts also showed the fewer languages skills such as, German, Spanish, and French, these languages were compared with English in 2000 and 2010.
In this charts, the categories of many language's, those were able to speak foreign languages rather than English 2000, and while English students were similar able to communicated with other International English during 2010 in Uinted Kingdom.
In the year 2000, a lot of students are able to conversations in Spanish language 20% in British country in 2000, and international's experts were speak German languages around 15% in the year of 2010 other than English.
year 2010 for, the number college and University ere able to connected with two languages approximately 10 percent in this period, while no other languages were not abled to experts in no other languages compared with English in this year.
in conclusion, few languages and other than English language speak at increased level in 2000 and in 2010 period, no one languages are spoken in British country with English skill.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by discussing the charts showing the proportions of British students able to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010. However, the response fails to provide an accurate and clear overview of the main features. Several data points are either misreported or confused; for instance, the text claims that 'international's experts were speak German languages around 15%', which does not accurately reflect the provided chart data where German only was 10%. Furthermore, the description of categories is highly confused and difficult to follow, leading to an under-developed summary of the visual data. The attempt at an overview or conclusion is vague and inaccurate, resulting in a low band score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are severely compromised by poor sentence structure and confusing cohesive ties. Transitions such as 'In this charts, the categories of many language's...' lack logical connection and clarity. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. While paragraphing is attempted, the internal cohesion within paragraphs is faulty and mechanical, leading to a breakdown in communication throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. Examples of inappropriate word choices and word forms include 'Britain students', 'few languages' (used to mean several languages), 'language's', and 'international's experts'. There is a lack of control over word formation and collocation, which frequently strains the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response, failing to achieve precision when discussing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. The text contains a high frequency of basic errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'these languages were compared with English in 2000 and 2010' and 'no other languages were not abled to experts'. Complex sentence forms are attempted, but they are almost always faulty and grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and comma splices. Errors frequently distort meaning and make parts of the text extremely difficult to parse.
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