Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrate the proportions of data of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

There are highest percentage of students, who unable to speak any other language except English is 30% but in 2010 it rise to 35%, then on second place, we have Spanish with highest number of speakers in 2000 with 20% but in 2010, we able to see decline by 10% and came along with French due to decline of 5% of French speakers.

In last, we remain with two more languages apart of the upper ones, which have a tie in between for covering same space in a pie chart in year 2000 which are German language and another is with two other languages contribute 10% in chart but in 2010 other languages speakers increase by 5% .

In result, Thire are numerous British students who have ability to speak different languages apart of English and there is huge change in gape of 10 years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, noting the proportions for no other language, Spanish, French, German, and multiple languages in 2000 and 2010. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall trends, such as the general increase in students speaking no other language alongside shifts in specific foreign languages. There are also several inaccuracies in reporting the data; for instance, the student states that Spanish had a decline of 10% and 'came along with French due to decline of 5%', whereas the charts show French dropping to 10% and Spanish dropping to 10%. Furthermore, some ideas are underdeveloped and the lack of a proper overview prevents the response from reaching a higher band level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response is divided into paragraphs, but the overall progression is difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'There are highest percentage of students...', 'then on second place', and 'In last, we remain with...'. These phrases create a mechanical and confusing flow rather than guiding the reader smoothly through the data. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it hard to connect the figures to the correct categories. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to maintain a clear and logical development of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('highest percentage', 'decline', 'increase', 'space in a pie chart'). There are numerous lexical and collocation errors, such as 'gape' instead of 'gap', 'Thire' (spelling error for There), and awkward phrasing like 'due to decline of 5% of French speakers'. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a precise discussion of statistical data, occasionally causing confusion for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student relies heavily on simple and faulty complex structures. Almost every sentence contains grammatical errors, such as missing auxiliary verbs ('who unable to speak'), incorrect verb tenses/forms ('it rise', 'we able to see'), and run-on sentences with poor punctuation ('...speakers in 2000 with 20% but in 2010, we able to see decline by 10% and came along with French...'). These frequent errors severely impede communication and demonstrate very limited control over grammatical range and accuracy.

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