Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of british students at one university in English were able yo speak other languages in addition to English over 2000 and 2010.
overall,the proportion of those students who spoke no other language increased and the smallest proportion accounted for two other languages.
In the 2000, only 30 % students of no other language was the largest proportion also Spanish had the second massive proportion listed 20% of students.While,the germen and two other languages accounted for only 10%. They show the least proportion ..
If we campare, 2000 and 2010 then we see the visible dramtical increase in no other language who have the highest percentage of 35%,the percentage of french also slightly increased 15% upto 20%. Both spanish and french share the same proportion of only 10%.We can clearly see that the proportion two other language also increased
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by summarizing the main features of the pie charts comparing British students' language skills in 2000 and 2010. However, the response fails to meet the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 144 words. Furthermore, there are several data misinterpretations and inaccuracies. For instance, the student states that the percentage of French increased from 15% up to 20% and that 'both spanish and french share the same proportion of only 10%', which misreads the 2010 figures where Spanish and French are separately at 10% each, while 'another language' rose to 20%. The overview is basic, and some key comparisons are unclear or incorrect. Because the length requirement is not met and there are factual inaccuracies in reporting the data, the score is capped at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four very short paragraphs, which gives it a structurally organized appearance. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesion and abrupt transitions, such as 'If we campare, 2000 and 2010 then we see the visible dramtical increase...'. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or awkward, and referencing is occasionally unclear. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs are underdeveloped and lack cohesive flow. Overall, the arrangement is somewhat coherent, but mechanical and faulty cohesive ties place this in the Band 5.0 range.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses a limited range of vocabulary relevant to the visual data, including terms like 'proportion', 'percentage', 'largest proportion', and 'least proportion'. There are multiple spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'british' (uncapitalized), 'germen' instead of 'German', 'campare', and 'dramtical'. Phrasing like 'massive proportion listed 20%' is unnatural and imprecise. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts about the charts, the frequent lexical errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are significant structural errors, such as missing verbs ('...students at one university in English were able yo speak...' and '...only 30 % students of no other language was the largest proportion...'). Punctuation is faulty, with spacing errors around commas and percentages. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text and occasionally cause confusion for the reader. Therefore, this performance fits the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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