Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart comapres the propotions of birtish students at univeristy in england who speaks other languages than english
overall ,it can be seen that many languages are speaken by birtish students in england which includes french,german , and other languages
in terms of spanish 20%of brithish can speak it with confidence on other hand it only 15 % birtish can speak french whereas only 10 % can speak german language only
Moreover, it can be seen there is highest percentage of 30 % of other languages spkoen by british people
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, stopping at only 91 words, which significantly impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, the student only describes the data for the year 2000 and completely omits any reference to the 2010 chart or any comparison between the two years. While an attempt is made to present an overview and mention a few features such as Spanish, French, German, and other languages, the lack of completeness and severe under-length restriction prevent this response from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response lacks proper paragraphing and is presented as a single short block of text. Cohesive devices are minimal, with repetitive use of basic connectors like 'in terms of', 'on other hand', and 'moreover'. While there is a basic attempt to sequence ideas from an introductory sentence to specific language categories, the overall organization is fragmented and fails to demonstrate a clear logical progression throughout an essay-length response.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. There are multiple spelling and word choice errors, such as 'comapres' for compares, 'propotions' for proportions, 'birtish' for British, 'univeristy' for university, 'speaken' for spoken, and 'spkoen' for spoken. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student relies heavily on direct repetition of words provided in the prompt rather than demonstrating a flexible or precise lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing contains numerous grammatical and punctuation errors. There are frequent capitalization issues ('birtish', 'england', 'french', 'german', 'spanish'), missing punctuation and capitalization at sentence boundaries, and awkward phrasing such as 'who speaks other languages than english' and 'it only 15 % birtish can speak french'. Simple sentence structures dominate, and attempts at more complex constructions are faulty and impede clear communication.
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