Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie graph illustrates the comparison of British students one university in England where they can speak alter languages and to English between 2000 and 2010.

Overall, two graphs are demonstarted in the picture one is 2000 and 2010, including their six distinct heads with percentages such as french, german, spanish, two other langauges, another langauges, and no other languages.

To begin with percentages of British students able to speak langauges other than english in 2000, the maximum 30% to No other langauge while the minimum was the 10% to Two other langauges. In addition, 20% to Spanish, 10% to german only and 15% to French only langauge was shows in the figure.

Futhermore, the speak langauges in 2010, the highest contributes the 35% to No other langauge along lowest both 10% to Spanish and French with german only. Moreover, the 15% added the two other langauges in the total percentage. Both figures consistently same data on top to No other langauges while in 20210 three contires adds to minimal. So, mainly they speak English.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the charts comparing the percentages of British students speaking other languages in 2000 and 2010. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in data reporting (for example, stating that German only was 10% in 2000 whereas the data shows German only is not listed separately with 10%, or misinterpreting categories). Furthermore, the overview is extremely basic and lacks a clear, well-developed summary of the overall trends. While the prompt's main data points are touched upon, the lack of precision and under-developed comparison places this performance at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for the two years. However, progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and lack of logical flow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'To begin with percentages' and 'Futhermore, the speak langauges in 2010', leading to mechanical and sometimes incomprehensible transitions. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is weak, resulting in an overall score of 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on the words provided in the prompt ('percentages', 'British students', 'languages'). There are numerous spelling errors ('demonstarted', 'langauges', 'futhermore', 'contires') and awkward word choices ('maximum 30% to No other langauge', 'highest contributes the 35%'). The range of vocabulary is strictly limited and inadequate for conveying precise meaning, fitting the Band 4.0/4.5 level, though basic adequacy pulls it marginally to a 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are heavily flawed and ungrammatical (e.g., 'The pie graph illustrates the comparison of British students one university in England where they can speak alter languages and to English'). There are persistent, severe errors in verb forms, prepositions, and sentence construction that constantly strain the reader and impede comprehension, warranting a Band 4.0.

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