Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustates the information about the British students able to speak languages other than english. The data has been calclulated in 2000 to 2010.
Taking a closer look from the chart that, British students are able to speak several languages rather than english. The chart shows that the highest proportion to speak spanish languages which is 20% in 2000 year. Moreover, the 30% British students were not spoken no other language except British. Furthermore, the lowest proportion to speak German and two other languages which are 10% in 2000 year. And lastly, we can see that the average proportion of the students who has speak French and Another languages which are 15% in the year 2000.
Overall, we can say that British students can speak many languages rather than England students at the university in year between 2000 to 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the charts, noting figures for Spanish, French, German, and those with no other language in 2000. However, the student fails to include any comparison or data from the 2010 chart, leaving a significant part of the prompt unaddressed. Furthermore, the word count is 142 words, which falls short of the mandatory 150-word minimum, leading to a negative impact on the task achievement score. The overview provided in the final paragraph is extremely brief and vague ("British students can speak many languages rather than England students"). To achieve a higher band, the student must report data for both years, draw explicit comparisons between them, and ensure the word count requirement is fully met.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into three brief paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak. The second paragraph starts awkwardly with "Taking a closer look from the chart that..." and lists disparate data points without a clear organizing principle. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, as seen in phrases like "And lastly, we can see that the average proportion of the students who has speak..." Furthermore, paragraphing is underdeveloped, and referencing lacks precision. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the student should use standard academic transition words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Overall') and group related data logically rather than listing numbers randomly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and basic. The student uses fundamental vocabulary related to percentages and proportions, but terms are frequently repeated or misused. For example, phrases like "the highest proportion to speak spanish languages" and "were not spoken no other language" demonstrate awkward collocation and grammatical entanglement with vocabulary. Spelling is generally acceptable, but word choices lack variety and precision. To reach a higher band, the student needs to employ less common lexical items and paraphrase data effectively instead of repeating exact terms from the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response shows a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and flawed complex constructions. There are several noticeable errors throughout the text, such as "illustates" (misspelling of illustrates), "calclulated" (calculated), "the highest proportion to speak spanish languages" (awkward infinitive and capitalization), and "students who has speak French". The sentence "the 30% British students were not spoken no other language" contains a double negative and passive voice error. These frequent errors impede smooth reading, though the general meaning remains mostly decipherable.
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