Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart gives information the proportions of British students at one University in England who were able to talk other languages in addition to English , between 2000 to 2010.

British students able to speak languages other than English in 2000 . In this century stundents said that they talk in spanish , as the results they talk 20% in spanish . They use spanish 20% in their discussion. On the other hand , they students use French 15% in their discussion. They display that spanish is most use in universtiys, students are be attrictive to spanish.Other language are most used 30% in universtiy . They show that students talk togather in other language.

In 2010 British students able to speak other language than English, Spanish or Frenche

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, stopping at only 128 words, which directly impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, the writing cuts off mid-sentence at the end. While the student attempts to report some figures from the charts, such as 20% for Spanish in 2000 and 15% for French, the interpretation and presentation of the data are highly confused and lack a clear overview. Several statements are inaccurate or difficult to follow, such as 'Other language are most used 30% in universtiy.' The response covers only a fraction of the necessary data comparisons between 2000 and 2010. Consequently, this falls under Band 4.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the text is very weak, featuring disjointed sentences and improper paragraphing. The response breaks into very short, disconnected paragraphs and single-sentence lines that do not logically progress. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, as seen with clumsy transitions like 'On the other hand' and 'They show that'. There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the abrupt ending further damages the coherence of the piece. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data points. This aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'talk', 'spanish', and 'university', which is also misspelled multiple times as 'universtiy'. There are severe word choice errors, such as using 'talk' instead of 'speak' or 'proportions'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or inappropriate for an academic task, such as 'be attrictive to'. Lexical control is weak throughout, and frequent spelling and word formation errors strain the reader's understanding. This performance is characteristic of Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty sentence structures. There are numerous basic errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage, such as 'they students use', 'Other language are most used', and 'students are be attrictive'. Punctuation is also erratic, and the response terminates abruptly with an incomplete sentence fragment. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning at times, fitting the Band 4 criteria.

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