Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart shows the british students able to speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.The chart was Pie Chart.It divided into 100%.It was Campare how many students able to speak languages other than engllish in 2000 and 2010.
In 2000 , their was 30% students not able to speak other languages .The French language Speak Students Was 15 % and 20% students speak spanish language.The 10 % Students speak German language and also 10 % Students speak two other languages.Another language Speak students was 15 %.
In 2010 , Their was 35 % students not able to speak other languages,Spanish,French and Greman languages was speak 10 % students each language, 15 % students speak two other languages and 20 % students speak anothe
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 125 words with an unfinished sentence. While the student attempts to report data from both years, such as mentioning the percentages for non-speakers (30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010), the overview is extremely basic and lacks a well-developed summary of main trends. Furthermore, the data description is somewhat repetitive and lists figures mechanically rather than drawing meaningful comparisons, placing this response at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from poor paragraphing and abrupt transitions. The opening consists of four very short, choppy sentences ('The chart was Pie Chart. It divided into 100%.') that break the logical flow. Although the writer attempts to structure the body paragraphs by year, the lack of appropriate cohesive devices and the unfinished concluding sentence mean that information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical errors in formatting and punctuation.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on direct lifts from the prompt and simple phrasing ('speak languages', 'other languages', 'students speak'). There are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'british' (lowercase), 'Campare', 'engllish', 'Greman', and 'anothe'. Less common lexical items are entirely absent, and the repetitive nature of the descriptions strains the reader at times, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences and basic subject-verb structures. There are frequent and systematic errors in grammar and punctuation, including missing articles ('The chart was Pie Chart'), incorrect verb forms ('their was 30% students not able', 'languages was speak 10 % students'), and capitalization errors. The text also ends mid-sentence. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 4.0.
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