Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given two pie-chart illustrates the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
In the first pie-chart, there were a huge number of no other language that were spoken in British. A lot of people prefer to not attending other language because of their personal choice. In addition to they were mostly intrested in Spanish language. British students have more perfect in spanish than other .Otherwise,French and Another language were 15% respectively. Where German and Two other languages were at the last percentages at10%respectively.
In the second pie-chart, there were a large amount of number with no other language and most of the people were attentedin another language at 20%.And then, other two languages were at 15%and Spanish,French andgerman were 10% respectively.
In the comparision of these two pie-chart, No other language were slightly increase in the year of 2010 by 5%. Another language abd Two other language also did their upward trends and it were climb up 5% respectively. As well as Spanish language decline with half of the year 2000 and went to 10%.French also showes thei downwards trend and it went to 10% in the year of 2010.At last German became stablee at 10%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing the two pie charts illustrating the proportions of British students able to speak other languages. However, the response falls short in several areas. First, it includes unsupported speculation and personal opinions that are not present in the data, such as 'A lot of people prefer to not attending other language because of their personal choice.' Furthermore, there are misinterpretations of the figures, and the overall summary is weak. The comparisons in the final paragraph are generally accurate regarding the upward and downward trends (e.g., noting that 'No other language were slightly increase' and Spanish declined), but the lack of a clear, cohesive overview and the inclusion of irrelevant commentary limit the score to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical layout of introduction, body paragraphs for each chart, and a concluding comparison. However, the progression of ideas is frequently hindered by repetitive and mechanical phrasing, such as starting multiple sentences with 'In the first pie-chart' and 'In the second pie-chart'. Cohesive devices are often misused or awkward, as seen in expressions like 'Otherwise, French and Another language' and 'At last German became stablee'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience. These features align best with a Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'number', 'people', and 'languages'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'prefer to not attending other language', 'British students have more perfect in spanish', and 'Another language abd Two other language also did their upward trends'. Spelling errors also occur, including 'intrested', 'attentedin', 'german', 'abd', 'showes', and 'stablee'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic trends, the frequent errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but these attempts are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('The given two pie-chart illustrates', 'No other language were slightly increase'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward tense consistency. Many complex sentences break down grammatically, such as 'In addition to they were mostly intrested in Spanish language' and 'it were climb up 5% respectively.' These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a Band 6.0.
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