Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The charts described the British students at university in England able to speak other languages in addition to English , in 2000 and 2010.
In England students use many languages to use comiunicte with other students. In 2010 incrers 5% of students use no other language to spoken compare to 2000. At university in England students use french language to communicate with other students 15% in 2000 ane 10% in 2010. German language is equaliy use to 2000 and 2010 to 10%.
Spanish language is use less 10% in 2010 compare to 2000. In England students use another language to spoken 20% in 2010 and 15% in 2000. Students use two other language in university in 2000 15% and 10% in 2000.
In conclusion, use different lauguage to communicate with other in universithy in England british students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, coming in at 137 words, which negatively impacts the overall task completion. While the student attempts to report some figures from the charts, such as the proportions for French, German, and those with no other language, the data reporting contains inaccuracies and confusion. For instance, the student states that students use two other languages in 2000 at '15% and 10% in 2000,' which misreads the chart data. Furthermore, there is no proper overview provided, and comparisons between the two years are poorly structured and underdeveloped, aligning with a Band 4.5 performance profile.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text is basic and lacks a clear overall progression. The response is broken into short, fragmented paragraphs with a very brief conclusion that contains severe word-order errors ('use different lauguage to communicate with other in universithy in England british students'). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, and referencing is frequently unclear, making the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks the structure required for an academic summary. These features reflect Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct copying or awkward paraphrasing from the prompt ('British students at university in England', 'other languages'). There are numerous spelling errors ('comiunicte', 'incrers', 'equaliy', 'lauguage', 'universithy') and incorrect word forms ('spoken' instead of 'speak'). The lexical range is severely limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response, resulting in frequent strain on the reader and matching a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are frequently ungrammatical. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and word order (e.g., 'In 2010 incrers 5% of students use no other language to spoken compare to 2000'). Complex structures are virtually absent, and the density of basic errors causes significant difficulty and distortion of meaning for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.
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