Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart compares the proportions of British students at one university in England were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. The languages consist on French, German and Spanish and demonstrate proportionally to each others.
Overall, In 2000, British students were able to speak Spanish ratio 20% and French proportion 15% which is less than Spanish and other languages were 30% proportionally spoken at university in England which are higher both languages. Those students were spoked both languages is amount 10% only.
Moreover, In 2010, British students were able to speak Spanish and French both were 10% proportionally and similar each others but compared with 2000 decreased. Another languages were 35% higher as compared to 2000. Two languages students had spoked in 2010 were 15%.
Further, German language spoken are similar in both years 2000 and 2010 wheras 10%. However, British students had spoked other languages significantly decreased from 2000 to 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by comparing the proportions of British students speaking various languages in 2000 and 2010. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the visual data. For instance, the text states that 'other languages were 30% proportionally spoken at university in England which are higher both languages', which is confusingly phrased and misreads the category proportions (No Other Language was 30% in 2000, while Another language was 15%). Furthermore, German is reported as 'wheras 10%' (representing German only), but the overall reporting lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the main trends. The summary touches on the general features, but the data reporting is frequently imprecise, pulling the score down to Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, attempting to structure the overview and body details separately. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and confusing transitions such as 'Moreover, In 2010...' and 'Further, German language spoken are similar...'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'consist on', 'similar each others'), and referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact comparisons being made. Paragraphing is present, but overall cohesion remains faulty throughout, aligning with a Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses a limited range of vocabulary related to statistics and languages, such as 'proportion', 'decrease', and language names. However, there are frequent word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'consist on' instead of 'consist of', 'demonstrate proportionally to each others', and 'Two languages students had spoked'. Precision is lacking, and expressions like 'Spanish ratio 20%' show a very basic command of lexical phrasing for data tasks. This level of vocabulary corresponds to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. The student attempts complex structures, but these are frequently faulty and ungrammatical, such as in the opening sentence: 'The pie chart compares the proportions of British students at one university in England were able to speak...'. There are numerous tense and form errors throughout, including 'were spoked', 'had spoked', and 'language spoken are similar'. Simple sentences dominate, and grammatical errors cause considerable strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
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