Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this given chart its showing about different languages spoken by British studnets of one university in the year of 2000 to 2010.

In this Chart showing that 20 Percent of student are spoken Spanish Language it means 20 Percent of Students are spoken English and Spanish Language Both. In other side 15 Percent of Student Spoken French Language, 10 percent Student are spoken German language and two other languages , 15 percent Student are spoken another language that is not mention in given pie chart, in this chart students those have only spoke English not spoke other languages.

In the other Chart it is showing that student who spoke other languages in year 2010.in this chart 10 percent student spoke spanish and french,20 percent student spoke another language, 15 percent student spoke German language Only, 20 percent student spoke another language and 35 percent student are only spoke english language they are not spoke any other language

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing the charts showing languages spoken by British students in 2000 and 2010. However, the information is presented in a very limited and tangential way. The student struggles to accurately report the data, confusing percentages and categories, such as stating that '20 Percent of student are spoken Spanish Language it means 20 Percent of Students are spoken English and Spanish Language Both'. Important key features and comparisons are poorly selected, and key data points from the visual information are misread or misconstrued. The overview is absent, and the overall treatment of the task remains minimal, fitting the lower band descriptor for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently. While the student attempts to separate the two charts into different paragraphs, the internal structure of these paragraphs lacks logical progression and clarity. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'In other side' and 'In the other Chart'. The referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall organization falls short of clear logical progression, reflecting the characteristics of this band level.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases, repeating terms like 'percent of student', 'spoke', and 'language' throughout the text. There are notable word form and word choice errors, such as 'studnets', 'are spoken', and 'not mention', which stem from lexical and structural confusion. While the language used is sufficient to convey a very basic gist of what the charts represent, the frequent errors and restricted range mean that the vocabulary remains limited and occasionally strains the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying almost exclusively on simple or heavily flawed sentence patterns. Grammatical errors are frequent and pervasive throughout the text, including severe issues with verb forms and tenses (e.g., 'its showing', 'are spoken', 'students those have only spoke'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions. These persistent errors frequently distort meaning and make the sentences difficult to parse. Complex sentence forms are either absent or attempted with such heavy error that they fail to demonstrate control over grammar.

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