Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provided pie chart illustrartes the information about thw propotion of british students able to speak languages other than english in 2000 and 2010 .
Overall,it is vivid that thew percentage of no other language is highest as copare to others.
getting into details ,in 2000 , the percentage of british students inspanish language is hold first position which is 20 . Followed by french which hold second position
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 69 words. Because of this severe under-length, the task is addressed only minimally. While the student attempts to introduce the topic and mentions a couple of data points such as the percentage for Spanish in 2000, the response lacks an overview and fails to provide a comprehensive summary or make necessary comparisons between the two years. To reach higher bands, the writer must ensure the word count requirement is fulfilled and include a clear overview alongside a balanced selection of key features from both charts.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organization with an introductory attempt and a transition phrase like 'getting into details', but overall progression is lacking. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical. Paragraphing is attempted, but sentences trail off and the structure breaks down quickly due to the incomplete nature of the response. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer needs to logically sequence ideas, develop a proper introduction with an overview, and use a wider range of cohesive links to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include typos such as 'illustrartes', 'thw', and 'propotion', as well as awkward phrasing like 'the percentage of british students inspanish language is hold first position'. The range is restricted to basic terms. To achieve a higher score, the student must expand their vocabulary range, learn correct spellings, and use precise collocations and word forms appropriate for academic reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting of basic sentence attempts with frequent errors. There are issues with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and missing articles, such as in 'the percentage of no other language is highest as copare to others' and 'french which hold second position'. Complex structures are not successfully attempted. To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of sentence structures, ensure correct verb tenses and forms, and minimize basic grammatical errors.
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