Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The above charts shows the british students able to speak other languages other than english. There are 2 charts, one chart shows the data of the year 2000 and other one shows the data of the year 2010.

If we look at the 2000 year chart there are 30% of the british students who speaks only english and no other language where as only 10% of population speaks german language. 15% of british students speaks another language. If we talk about students who speaks english as well as french there are 15% of the british students. Spanish is very curious language and this is also present in the chart so 20% of the students speaks spanish with english. Rest 10% of the students speak two other languages

Now next chart of the year 2010 increases the % of the students who speaks only english which is 35%.

also there are 10% of students who speaks only french. if we talk about german there are only 10% of students speaks. where as 10% of students speaks spanish. 20% of the students speak another language. lastly there are 15% of the british students who speaks two other languages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially. While the student attempts to report some figures from the charts, the selection of data lacks a clear overview and fails to provide adequate comparisons between the two years, as required by the prompt. Many of the descriptions are a simple, mechanical listing of percentages with little synthesis. Furthermore, some data points are inaccurate or poorly interpreted, such as the claim that 'Spanish is very curious language' which wanders from objective reporting into irrelevant personal commentary. To move toward a higher band, the writer needs to select the most significant trends, present a clear summary of the overall changes over the decade, and ensure all key features are reported accurately without subjective remarks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation in the response, dividing the information into an introduction, a paragraph for the year 2000, and a paragraph for the year 2010. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical flow connecting the ideas smoothly. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inadequately and repetitively, such as the repetitive use of 'there are' and 'if we talk about'. Paragraphing is also poorly handled, with the first sentence separated awkwardly from the rest of the introduction. To improve, the student should use a wider variety of cohesive links to connect sentences and ideas, and structure the response into a coherent introduction, a clear overview, and well-organised body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms and repeating phrases like 'british students', 'speaks', and percentages throughout the text. There are also noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as describing Spanish as a 'very curious language', which detracts from the academic register required for this task. Spelling is generally acceptable for common words, but the lack of flexibility and precision restricts the score. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their lexical range by incorporating synonyms, less common vocabulary related to data trends, and maintaining a strictly formal, objective tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple and repetitive clauses. Attempts at slightly more complex structures often result in grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The above charts shows' and 'students who speaks'). There are also frequent missing articles and punctuation errors throughout the response. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a lack of control over basic grammatical forms. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to practise forming accurate complex sentences, maintain correct verb agreements, and ensure proper punctuation and article use.

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