Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrate the proportions of brithish students at one university in England that checks which students are able to speak other languages in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.I believe, that most of the students were able to speak other language now.

Regarding to chart in 2000 mostly students were not able to speak other language at that time students ratio were less than as compared in 2010 30 percent students were not able to speak other languages.

Overall,in 2000 mostly students were able to speak spanish according to chat 20 percent studenyts who were able to speak spanish language.And other language students are ver less.But in 2010,the ratio of students who doesn,t able to speak other language increase form 30 percent to 35 percent its a drawback for students or university but later spanish students ratio become less tan 20 percent its become 10 percent and french students ratio also decreases from 15 to 10 percent these are disappointment for students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and mention several relevant figures, including Spanish falling from 20% to 10%, French from 15% to 10%, and students speaking no other language rising from 30% to 35%. However, the account is only partial: it does not clearly summarise the full distribution or compare all major categories. The statement that “most of the students were able to speak other language” is not supported; in both years, the largest single group was unable to speak another language. The overview is also unclear, and calling the increase a “drawback” or the decreases “disappointment” adds opinion rather than describing the data. Focus on the main patterns and report them neutrally.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overall statement, and references to 2000 and 2010. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview and details are mixed together, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate the main summary from comparisons. Linking phrases such as “Regarding to chart” and “Overall” do not reliably clarify how the ideas relate; some sentences combine several figures and opinions without a clear sequence. For a more coherent report, use a brief introduction, a distinct overview, and then group the comparisons—for example, categories that increased and those that decreased. Use clear references to each year and avoid repeating the same general point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportions,” “ratio,” “increase,” and “decreases,” so the reader can recognise that the response concerns changes in language groups. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “students ratio,” “other language students are ver less,” and “spanish students ratio.” Spelling errors, including “brithish,” “chat,” and “studenyts,” also reduce clarity. The evaluative terms “drawback” and “disappointment” are not appropriate for a neutral chart summary. Build a more precise vocabulary for describing proportions and trends, and check spelling and collocations. For example, refer to “the proportion of students” and say a category “rose” or “fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “students ratio were less than as compared in 2010,” “students who doesn’t able to speak,” and “increase form 30 percent to 35 percent.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries need attention. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the opening and the long sentence beginning “But in 2010.” Most structures are simple or are extended in ways that become faulty. Practise accurate comparative forms such as “the proportion rose from 30% to 35%,” and separate each main comparison into a complete sentence with a clear subject and verb.

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