Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given charts illustrate the informations about the British students at one university in England and these students are speak other languages in additions to English, in 2000 and 2010.

First of all, 30% students speak no other language in 2010 while compare to the 2010 35% of students speak no other languages, for the French language only 15% of students speak French in 2000 while compare in to the 2010 there are 10% of students speaks French language.

German language are 10% percent which students are speaking, and for the Spanish only 20% of students are speak in the university in 2000, another language are only 15% students are speak in the university. In last of the 2000 in british university 10% students are speak two other languages.

in 2010 10% students are speak German language, spanish language only same at the german language percentage, 20% students are speak another language in last, 15% students are speak two other languages. .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report several relevant figures, including French-only speakers falling from 15% to 10%, German remaining at 10%, and the shares speaking another language or two other languages rising to 20% and 15%. However, the opening does not give a clear overview of the main changes, and the account is largely a list of figures rather than a summary of the most important features. There is also a significant contradiction: you say that 30% spoke no other language in 2010, then state that the 2010 figure was 35%; the correct comparison is 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010. Spanish also falls from 20% to 10%, but this change is not clearly compared. Select the key trends and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic time-based order, moving from figures for 2000 to those for 2010, and phrases such as “while compare” show an attempt to make comparisons. However, the information is not organised into clear paragraphs or a consistent overview-and-details structure. The opening is followed immediately by a dense list, and the transition “First of all” does not clarify how the figures are grouped. Repeated constructions such as “students speak” and “in the university” make the progression mechanical, while the contradictory statements about the no-other-language category interrupt the reader’s understanding. Group the main trends in a short overview, then use separate, logically ordered details for the two years or for categories that rise and fall.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “French,” “German,” “Spanish,” and “two other languages,” so the reader can identify the categories being described. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “students are speak” and “another language are only 15% students.” “The informations” is also an incorrect form, and “in additions to English” is an awkward expression. These choices sometimes make the meaning harder to follow, even though the chart categories remain recognisable. Aim for concise reporting language and accurate collocations, for example, “the proportion of students speaking Spanish” or “the figure for another language.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect comparisons in longer sentences, but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur throughout, sometimes making relationships between figures unclear. Examples include “these students are speak,” “30% students speak,” and “German language are 10% percent,” which show problems with verb forms, articles, and subject–verb agreement. The comparison “while compare to the 2010” is also not grammatically formed, and the first sentence lacks a clear, accurate clause structure. Most statements rely on the same simple pattern rather than showing controlled variety. Practise accurate present-tense reporting structures, such as “30% of students spoke no other language in 2000, compared with 35% in 2010,” and check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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