Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts demonstarte the data of British pupils at one prime university in England who were capable to speak different languages additionally English, in 2000 and 2010. The scale is in percentage.

Overall,

To start with, no other language had highest proportion with 30% of British student who were not speak in 2000. While, in 2010 it had increased by 5%. In 2000 French and another language were similar at just 15% who able to speak this both languages. British who were able to speak German was 10% in both the year. Whereas, spanish and two other languages were 20% and 10% respectively.

Additionally, in 2010, French and Spanish were same only 10% in 2010. Whlie, two other languages and another language were accounted nearly 20%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two years and report several relevant figures, including the 30% with no other language in 2000, the rise to 35% in 2010, and German remaining at 10%. However, the overview is left unfinished after “Overall,” so the main pattern is not summarised. Some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: French and another language were both 15% in 2000, but the final sentence suggests both “two other languages and another language” were nearly 20% in 2010, although their values were 15% and 20%. The response also omits a clear account of the overall shift toward students speaking other languages. It is 23 words below the required minimum, which further limits the detail reported. Include a complete overview and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a separate overview paragraph, and two paragraphs of data. The year-based grouping helps the reader follow the comparisons, and linking expressions such as “To start with” and “Additionally” show an attempt to connect points. However, the overview paragraph contains no information, leaving the report without a clear central progression. Several transitions are awkward or contradictory, particularly “While” and “Whereas” used to begin fragments, and the final paragraph repeats “in 2010.” Relationships between figures are sometimes difficult to follow. Build a complete overview, then organise the details consistently by year or by categories that changed, using linking words only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted,” and “able to speak,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “one prime university” is not supported by the task, “speak different languages additionally English” is awkward, and “who were not speak” does not express the intended meaning clearly. There are also spelling errors, including “demonstarte” and “Whlie,” and inconsistent capitalisation of “Spanish.” These issues make parts of the report less fluent. Prefer standard chart-reporting phrases such as “students at a university,” “in addition to English,” and “accounted for,” and proofread spelling and category names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but control is uneven, and several sentence patterns are incomplete or inaccurate. For example, “who were not speak in 2000” has an incorrect verb form, while “French and another language were similar at just 15% who able to speak this both languages” lacks a clear grammatical structure. “While, in 2010 it had increased by 5%” is also a fragment, and “German was 10% in both the year” has a number-agreement error. These problems sometimes make the intended comparison harder to understand. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate forms such as “students who spoke no other language” and “the figure increased by five percentage points.”

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