Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Initially, 20 percentage British students who speak spanish in 2000 However, Almost 10 percenrage British students who speak

Two Other languages in 2000. Moreover, 30 percentage British students who speak no other language in England.

On the other side, 15 percentage British students who speak another language in 2000,However, 10 percentage german was speak by British students in 2000, Howerever ,15 percentage British students who speak French language in 2000

In addition, The value of spanish language who speak by British students showed downfall in 2010 it went to10 percentage Howerver ,the value of Two Other languages showed rose in 2010 it went upto 35 percentage Moreover, The value of French language increase in 2010 it upto 20 percentage, Moreover The value of Another language increase in 2010 it went upto 20 percentge

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two years and report several relevant categories, including Spanish, French, German, and students speaking no other language. However, important figures are misreported: in 2010, two other languages rose to 15%, not 35%, and French fell to 10%, rather than increasing to 20%. The overview is also missing, so the main pattern—that speaking no other language was the largest group in both years and increased, while Spanish declined—is not clearly summarised. The response contains 136 words, below the required 150, which limits the opportunity to select and explain the key comparisons. Add a concise overview and check each figure against the chart before describing changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response makes an attempt to group information by year: most of the first paragraph discusses 2000, while the final section turns to 2010. This gives the reader some basic direction. However, the sequence within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and there is no clear overview to establish the main comparisons. Linking expressions such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “On the other side” are repeated or used where the relationship between ideas is unclear; several are also attached directly to the preceding sentence. Organise the report into a brief introduction, an overview, and two comparison-focused detail paragraphs. Use connectors only when they accurately show contrast or addition, and separate each sentence with appropriate punctuation.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “percentage,” “value,” and “increase,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “British students who speak” and “the value of” used repeatedly. Several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “showed downfall,” “showed rose,” and “French language,” which make the report sound unnatural. Spelling errors such as “percenrage” and “Howerever” also reduce accuracy. Build a small set of precise reporting phrases and use them consistently—for example, describe a category’s share as rising, falling, or remaining unchanged. Check spelling and choose natural collocations when describing chart data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report figures in both past and present forms, but sentence structures are mostly simple and frequently incomplete or inaccurately formed. For example, “Initially, 20 percentage British students who speak spanish in 2000” has no complete main clause, while “10 percentage german was speak by British students” has an incorrect passive construction. Subject–verb agreement and articles are also problematic in “The chart illustrate” and “the value of Two Other languages showed rose.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, especially where sentences run together after “However” and “Moreover.” Practise complete subject–verb sentences such as “Spanish accounted for 20% in 2000,” then use a controlled range of comparison structures, checking tense and agreement.

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