Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart below illustrates the proption of british students at one university in England they were understand and speak other languages alongside with english, between 2000 and 2010.

Overall, in the year 2010, there was significant increased in spanish and german language stayed same as it was in year 2000.

In the year 2000, the students 30 percents who were not able to speak other language that slightly climbed 5 percents in the year 2010. meanwhile, 2010 spanish laguage surged 10 percent in contrast 2000. In the year 2000 their were 10 percent students who sopke other language in the year 2010 it improved 5 percent and the same 5 percent increased who were able to spoke ather language. Similarly, 5 percent increased in german language in the year 2010 that was 10 percent in the year 2000.

students started focusing on spanish and french language and the german remained same as it was in the year 2000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and make an attempt at an overview, but the main features are not reported accurately enough. The overview says Spanish increased, whereas its share fell from 20% to 10%; French also fell from 15% to 10%. German remained at 10%, while the proportion speaking no other language rose from 30% to 35%. Some figures are confused: “Spanish language surged 10 percent” reverses the trend, and the sentence about “other language” does not clearly distinguish another language from two other languages. The final claim that students focused on Spanish and French is not supported by the data. To improve, give a clear overview of the largest changes and compare the categories accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then details. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons are compressed into long, unclear sentences. For example, “In the year 2000 their were 10 percent students who sopke other language in the year 2010 it improved 5 percent” does not make the category or comparison clear. The repeated references to “the year 2000” and “the year 2010” do not create a reliable sequence, and “meanwhile” and “Similarly” do not always connect ideas logically. Group the figures into clear comparisons, use one sentence per trend, and separate the overview from supporting details more effectively.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “increased,” “remained,” and “in contrast,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing changes over time. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the data difficult to interpret. “Understand and speak other languages” is not a natural description of the chart, while “surged” is unsuitable for a category that actually declined. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “proption,” “british,” “laguage,” and “sopke.” Aim for precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” “fell to,” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent and frequent errors sometimes obscure the comparisons. Examples include “there was significant increased,” where the adjective and noun form are incorrect, and “the students 30 percents who were not able,” which lacks a clear grammatical structure. In “german language stayed same as it was in year 2000,” articles and sentence structure are missing; “students who were able to spoke” also uses the wrong verb form. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are weak, particularly where separate year comparisons run together. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and basic comparison patterns, such as “The figure rose from 30% to 35%,” before attempting longer sentences.

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