Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts illustrates the proportions of Bristish students at one university in England who were capable to speak other languages in addition to Engglish,in 2000 and 2010

Overall,No Other Language students were the largest porportion in both years,while French and spanish students were declined. Proportion of Two other Lnaguage increased slightly and German only students were almost same.

In 2000,no other language speak students were 30% and this figure increased slightly to 35%,spanish spoken students fell slighlty 20% to 10%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad pattern that “No Other Language” was the largest category in both years, and you report its rise from 30% to 35% and Spanish’s fall from 20% to 10% accurately. However, the response is far too brief to summarise the charts adequately: it omits the figures and comparisons for French, German, another language and two other languages, and the overview is incomplete. The statement that French declined is correct, but it is not supported with data. The response contains 72 words, below the required 150; this leaves the task only minimally addressed. To improve, write a complete overview and compare the main categories with accurate figures, including the unchanged German share and the increases in the other categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a paragraph with figures. This gives the reader a simple overall sequence, and “while” helps contrast the largest category with the language trends. However, the response ends abruptly after the Spanish comparison, so there is no complete progression through the chart data. Connections between figures are often compressed into one long sentence, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent, as in “35%,spanish”. Use separate, clearly focused sentences or paragraphs to group categories, and add linking expressions such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” where they clarify comparisons. More complete coverage would also make the organisation feel less fragmentary.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions”, “increased”, “declined” and “fell”, and these choices help communicate the main trends. However, the range is limited and several word-choice or spelling errors make the writing less clear, including “Bristish”, “Engglish”, “porportion” and “Lnaguage”. Phrases such as “students were capable to speak” and “No other language speak students” are not natural ways to describe the chart categories. Prefer precise labels such as “students who spoke no other language” and “the proportion of students speaking Spanish”. Check spelling carefully and use the chart’s categories consistently; this will make comparisons clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few sentence forms, including a relative clause in “students at one university in England who were capable…” and a contrast using “while”. However, the range is very limited, and frequent errors affect accuracy. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“The charts illustrates”), while “were declined” uses an incorrect passive form for a trend. The phrase “Proportion of Two other Lnaguage increased” is missing an article, and the final sentence joins two comparisons with a comma rather than clear sentence punctuation. Aim for accurate simple structures first: for example, “The proportion of students speaking Spanish fell from 20% to 10%.” Then add a small number of controlled complex sentences. Check agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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