Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Introduction:

the provided pie chart illustratares fluctuations in british student at one university in englind through out [redacted phone] concentrating primarily on french,german,spanish,another language,two language and no other language it is structurate to diplay how data evolved chronologically.

Overview:

Broadely speaking,no other language followed a distinct upward trajectory where as the anyother language,french,german,spanish and two other lanuages headed in the reverce direction the most striking pattern is that while emission the no other language upwards significantily over time the french,german,spanish,two other languages and another language experienced steady decreases converinging near the same lavel by 2010.

Detail:

in specific term the no other language is 30% while spanish is 20%,french and another language is 15%,german and two other language is only 10% commenced at 20% in 2000 and dropped at 2010.no other language were increases by 2007 the spanish and no other language ratio were increase in 2010.

Conclusion:

the final result of this pie chat is most of the british student able to speak at the first stsge no other language ratio is 30% while second stage spanish is 20%,the german and two other language ratio is 10% while french and another language ratio is 15% it mean the most of the british students no language ratio and spanish was increase and all the other language ratio were decreases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s topic and include several correct 2000 figures, such as 30% for students speaking no other language, 20% for Spanish, and 10% for German and two other languages. However, the response only partially reports the comparison across both years. It does not accurately give the 2010 figures, and the claim that French, German, Spanish, two other languages and another language all decreased is incorrect: “another language” rose from 15% to 20%, and “two other languages” rose from 10% to 15%. The statement that Spanish and no other language increased is also inaccurate, since Spanish fell to 10%. Focus the overview on the main rises and falls, then support it with accurate figures for both years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, overview, detail paragraph and conclusion, so the reader can see an attempt to organise the report. However, the information does not progress clearly: the detail paragraph gives mostly starting values, then introduces an unclear reference to 2007, while the conclusion repeats those same 2000 figures rather than summarising the comparison. Linking phrases such as “Broadely speaking” and “in specific term” signal sections, but connections between ideas are often inaccurate or repetitive. Organise the body by comparing the categories that rose with those that fell, and use the conclusion only for the overall pattern rather than repeating the opening data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some task-related vocabulary, including “upward trajectory,” “ratio,” “evolved chronologically” and “most striking pattern.” This shows an effort to describe trends, but the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “emission” does not fit the chart, “headed in the reverse direction” is unclear, and “converinging near the same lavel” does not describe the figures accurately. Spelling errors such as “illustratares,” “Broadely” and “lanuages” also reduce clarity. Use precise chart language such as “proportion,” “increased,” “declined” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and clauses, for example, “Broadely speaking, no other language followed a distinct upward trajectory where as…” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries frequently make the report hard to read. Examples include “the no other language is 30%,” “french and another language is 15%,” and “no other language were increases.” Tense and comparison forms are also unclear in “commenced at 20% in 2000 and dropped at 2010.” Use simple, controlled sentences to report each comparison, ensuring the subject and verb agree and that past-tense forms are consistent. Full stops and commas should separate the data points clearly.

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