Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Pie chart illustrates the percentage of UK students in England who could speak English as well as other languages at university from 2000 to 2010.

Overall, the ratio of four languages increased slightly while ratio of one languages remain constant and ratio of one language decreased little bit.

The two other language increased from 10 percent to 15 percent. Moreover, the another language had rose from 15 to 20 percent and there is a slight increase in no other language from 30 to 35 percent between 2000 and 2010. In general there is an increase of 5 percent in all three languages.

The German language remained constant in both charts as there percentage is constant 10 percent while there is a decrease in Spanish

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the rise in “two other languages” from 10% to 15%, “another language” from 15% to 20%, and no other language from 30% to 35%. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “four languages” is not a chart category, and the claim that one-language categories remained constant overlooks the falls in Spanish (20% to 10%) and French (15% to 10%). German alone stayed at 10%. The final sentence also leaves the Spanish comparison unfinished. The response is 25 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the limited coverage and lack of detail. Include a clear overview and report the main increases and decreases accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph of comparisons, and time markers such as “between 2000 and 2010” help establish the period. However, progression is weak because the overview’s categories (“four languages” and “one languages”) are unclear, and the body groups increases without clearly contrasting them with the decreases. The final sentence ends abruptly after “there is a decrease in Spanish,” leaving the comparison incomplete. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “while” are used, but they do not consistently make the relationships between points clear. Organise the details into clear groups—categories that increased, stayed stable, and decreased—and complete each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “increased,” “remained constant,” and “decrease,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or awkward, such as “ratio of four languages,” “one languages,” and “the another language.” “In general there is an increase of 5 percent in all three languages” is also an inaccurate description of the categories, rather than a precise summary. Use the chart’s category labels consistently and choose verbs that describe the data directly, such as “rose,” “fell,” or “remained unchanged.” Greater precision would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple sentences and attempts some longer structures, for example, “Moreover, the another language had rose from 15 to 20 percent and there is a slight increase…” However, errors are frequent: “the ratio … increased” is followed by “remain,” “the another language” has an incorrect article, and “there percentage is constant” has faulty agreement and sentence structure. The past perfect form “had rose” is also incorrect, and the final sentence is incomplete. These problems sometimes make relationships between the data difficult to interpret. Practise consistent past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, and check articles and sentence completeness. Short, accurate comparisons would be a useful foundation before adding more complex structures.

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