Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The illustrated two pie charts provide information about the ratio of British learners at one university in England who were to speak other languages in addition to English ,from 2000 to 2010, units are measured in percentage.

overall, the most striking aspect shown in this figure is that the figure for No other language was the most popular while the percentage of German was the least popular over the period of time.

At the beginning,the proportion of French decreased slowly from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010,while the period between 2000 to 2010 experienced a gradual rise in this figure No other language,which went up from 30% to 30%.Between 2000 and 2010 German had no change.

However, The ratio of another language witnessed a minimal rise from 15 in 2000 to 20 in 2010,whereas between 2000 and 2010 Spanish fall markedly from 20% to 10%.The period between 2000 and 2010 went thrugh a minimal alteration in Two other language ,which went up from 10% to 15%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant changes, including French falling from 15% to 10%, Spanish falling from 20% to 10%, and “another language” rising from 15% to 20%. However, the overview is not fully accurate: no other language was the largest category in both years, but German was not the least popular throughout; in 2010, French and Spanish were also at 10%. More importantly, you state that “No other language” rose from 30% to 30%, whereas it increased to 35%. The response reports most categories but gives limited synthesis of the overall pattern, and the inaccurate key figure weakens coverage. Check each comparison against the chart and make the overview capture the main changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing changes. Comparisons are grouped to some extent, and linking expressions such as “while” and “whereas” help show contrast. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview’s claim about the least popular category conflicts with the later information, and the sentence about “No other language” is difficult to follow because it combines a trend with an incorrect repeated value. Several transitions, including “At the beginning” and “However,” feel mechanical or do not clearly signal the relationship between the figures. Organise the details into clearer comparisons and use linking words only where they accurately express the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “decreased,” “rise,” and “fall markedly,” and the reader can generally understand which categories are being compared. There is also an attempt to vary phrasing with “witnessed” and “minimal alteration.” However, some expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the ratio of another language” and “the most popular” for chart categories. Repetition of “the period between 2000 and 2010” makes the description less flexible, while spelling errors such as “thrugh” and inconsistent forms such as “Two other language” reduce accuracy. Use standard chart language such as “the proportion of students speaking…” and check spelling and category labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons joined with “while” and “whereas.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “who were to speak” is not an appropriate verb construction, and “Spanish fall” should use a past-tense form. The sentence beginning “the period between 2000 to 2010 experienced…” has an awkward grammatical structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and unnecessary capitalisation after “However.” Articles, sentence boundaries and verb forms also need closer control. Build accurate short comparison sentences first, then combine them using a clear subordinate clause or conjunction.

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