Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The rendered pie charts explicit the information regarding British students who are able to speak language other than English for one decade. The data is calibrated in percentage.

Overall, the maximum percentage of students who do not speak any other language and least proportion of scholars who can speak Dutch only.

In 2000, the highest percentage of people who did not able to speak other language. 20% students spoke Spanish language. Moreover, 15% of French students spoke their native language . Germany and other two language were spoke by students of England .

After a decade, tutees who did not speak other language were 35%, while only a difference of 15% students spoke other languages. Two other languages were spoken by students with 15%. A tiny fraction of students who are expert in speaking Spanish, French, and Germany languages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two years and report some relevant figures, including 20% for Spanish in 2000 and 35% with no other language in 2010. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the overview incorrectly says Dutch was the least common language, although Dutch is not shown, and it does not clearly summarise the main changes. Several comparisons are missing or unclear, such as Spanish falling from 20% to 10%, French from 15% to 10%, and “another language” rising from 15% to 20%. The statement that only a 15% difference spoke other languages is not a clear or accurate summary of the chart. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum. Select the main trends, report them accurately, and support the overview with clear comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for 2000 and 2010. Time markers such as “In 2000” and “After a decade” help the reader follow the chronology. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited, and some details appear as disconnected statements rather than a comparison of the charts. For example, “Germany and other two language were spoke” does not clearly explain which categories or figures are being reported. Linking words such as “Moreover” and “while” are used, but they do not consistently clarify the relationship between ideas. Group the main increases and decreases, and use clear references to the chart categories so the comparison develops logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportion,” and “speak,” and you vary the wording for students with terms such as “scholars” and “tutees.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the information difficult to understand. “Dutch only” is not a chart category, while “French students” and “students who are expert” do not accurately describe the language groups. Phrases such as “the data is calibrated” and “maximum percentage” are also unsuitable in this context. Use the chart’s category labels consistently—such as “French only,” “another language,” and “two other languages”—and choose straightforward, precise reporting language rather than forcing synonyms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use a few different sentence patterns, including a contrast with “while” and time phrases to organise the report. However, grammatical control is weak: errors are frequent, and some sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. Examples include “the highest percentage of people who did not able to speak,” which needs a correctly formed verb phrase, and “Germany and other two language were spoke,” which has problems with articles, number, and passive construction. The final sentence, “A tiny fraction of students who are expert…,” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. Practise complete subject–verb structures and accurate past-tense reporting, for example, “In 2000, 20% of students spoke Spanish.”

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