Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given two bar chart display the amount of same british students at university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
Overall,there are all together 6 different language that are able to speak english in a university.the percentage of students who could'nt speak no other language was largest in 2000 and increased in 2010.
In 2000,30% of students could not speak any other language and making it largest group.Spanish was the most popular additional language,at 20%.Meanwhile 15% spokeanother language.German only and two other languages each consider for 10%.
IN 2010,the proportion of who could not speak any other language increased from 30% to 35%.Similarly,the Spanish fell down 20% to 10%.Whilw the percentage of stidents speaking another language increased from 15% to 20%.French only remained for 10%,while German also remainednat 10%.Finally ,15% could speak two other languages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify several key figures accurately, including the largest category in both years (no other language: 30% and then 35%), the fall in Spanish from 20% to 10%, and the rise in “another language” from 15% to 20%. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: there are six categories, not “6 different language[s],” and the statement that students “couldn't speak no other language” is confusing. French is omitted for 2000, and the comparison of the main changes is not fully developed. The response also contains 128 words, below the 150-word minimum; 18 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Add a clearer overview and cover the categories more completely.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic, useful structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for 2000 and 2010. This makes the year-by-year information reasonably easy to follow. However, progression is limited because the overview does not clearly summarise the main contrasts, and the body paragraphs list figures without consistently grouping related changes. Linking words such as “Meanwhile,” “Similarly,” and “Finally” help signal relationships, but some are used awkwardly or do not make the comparison clear. For example, “Similarly” introduces the increase in students speaking no other language, followed by a decrease in Spanish. Build a more explicit overview and use comparisons to connect the two years rather than relying mainly on a sequence of figures.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “most popular,” and “increased,” so the reader can understand the general subject and several trends. However, the range is limited and there are noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems. Phrases such as “amount of same british students,” “the Spanish fell down,” and “remained for 10%” are not natural ways to describe these data. There are also misspellings and joined words, including “Whilw,” “stidents,” and “spokeanother,” which reduce clarity. Aim for precise expressions such as “the proportion of students,” “fell from … to …,” and “accounted for 10%,” and check spelling and spacing carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer structures, for example “the percentage of students who could'nt speak no other language was largest in 2000 and increased in 2010,” but control is inconsistent and many sentences contain grammatical errors. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“chart display”), while “there are all together 6 different language that are able to speak english” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Other examples include “German only and two other languages each consider for 10%” and “the proportion of who could not speak…”. Articles, plurals, verb forms, and punctuation also need attention. Use straightforward, accurate sentence patterns first, then add comparisons with controlled clauses, such as “Spanish fell from 20% to 10%, whereas the figure for another language rose.”
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