Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The available chart illustrate the number of england university british students who have command to speak multiple languages included english in 2000 and 2010 .

according to available pi charts in 2000 highiest porportion 30% were graduates and undergraduates who were unable to speak other languages but in 2010 The proportion of students who spoke only English increased from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010, while the figure for Spanish speakers fell from 20% to 10%. .In contrast lowest value 10% recorded by german speakers and 10% by those who were able to speak two other languages

The proportion of students who could speak two other languages increased to 15% in 2010 on the other hand the number of french speakers drop down to 10 % althought number of students practise to speak another language remain constant in between 2000 and 2010 . In contrast porportion of spanish speaking students reduce to only 10 % in 2010 and another 10% occupied german speaking people in university .on the other hand Students with ability to speak two other languages incresing upto 15% in 2010 .

Overall highest porportion contributed by those who were able to speak only english rather then other languages in contrast Spanish and French actually decreased 2010 but German speaking students portion remain constant in 2000 and 2010 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern: students speaking only English formed the largest group in both years, while Spanish and French declined and German remained unchanged. The figures you give for these categories, as well as the rise in students speaking two other languages, match the charts. You also mention the increase in “another language” in the body, though you incorrectly say it “remain constant”; it rose from 15% to 20%. The response addresses the task and includes relevant comparisons, but some features are repeated and the overview does not clearly summarise all the main changes. To strengthen the report, give a concise overview and check each category against the chart before describing its trend. The reference to graduates and undergraduates is unsupported by the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from a description of the charts to comparisons and ends with an overview. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are repeated, including the decline in Spanish and the rise in students speaking two other languages. Linking phrases such as “on the other hand” and “in contrast” appear frequently, sometimes where no clear contrast is being made. The opening sentence also runs directly into the next point, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate the overview from detailed comparisons. Group the key trends into a small number of paragraphs, avoid repeating figures, and use linking expressions only when they show a genuine relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “increased,” “fell,” and “remain constant,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being compared. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “command to speak,” “highest proportion contributed by,” and “number of students practise to speak.” Spelling errors, including “porportion,” “incresing,” and “highiest,” also reduce precision. Some category labels are expressed inconsistently, which can make the data harder to interpret. Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “the proportion of students who could speak…” and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “while the figure for Spanish speakers fell…” and “although number of students…”. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation are noticeable. The opening, “The available chart illustrate,” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the number of students practise to speak another language remain constant” has problems with verb form and agreement. Several sentences are joined awkwardly or punctuated with extra full stops, making the relationships between clauses unclear. Use a reliable pattern for comparisons—such as “The proportion speaking Spanish fell from 20% to 10%”—and check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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