Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this we will discuss about the british students who speaks languages in addition to english. In 2000 , the british students offenky speak other languges . Mostly , they only speak english . But some of them can speak other languges like, spanish , french , etc . Only 20% of the students can speak spanish because its not there mother languge. On the other hand, only 15 % students only speak french. Only few of them can speak german. Meanwhile, in 2000 there is only 10% university students can speak other languges and 30% students was those who only speak english no ither languge.

In 2010, the percentage of no other languge is high as compared to 2000 . The students who speak spanish is 10% only. And the students who speak french is 20% .

Overall the percentage of 2000 is high . And the 2010 is way below to 2000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and report several relevant figures, including Spanish at 20% in 2000 and the no-other-language group at 30%. However, coverage is incomplete and some key comparisons are inaccurate: French in 2010 was 10%, not 20%, and the 2010 figures for German, another language, and two other languages are omitted. The statement that “the percentage of 2000 is high” and that 2010 is “way below” is unclear and does not accurately summarise the overall pattern: the no-other-language share rose, while several language categories changed in different directions. Include a clear overview of these contrasting trends and report the main categories accurately to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic time-based order, moving from 2000 to 2010, and uses simple links such as “On the other hand,” “Meanwhile,” and “Overall.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited: the first paragraph combines several figures with repeated statements about speaking English, while the second gives only two comparisons before a vague conclusion. Some linking phrases do not clarify the relationship between ideas, and the overview is not clearly separated from the details. Organise the response into a brief introduction, a clear overview, and paragraphs comparing the data, grouping categories that rose, fell, or stayed the same.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on phrases such as “speak other languages,” “only,” and “students.” Some chart-related wording is relevant, but several spelling and word-choice errors make the description less clear, including “offenky,” “languges,” and “no ither languge.” The phrase “the percentage of 2000 is high” is also imprecise because it does not identify what is being compared. Use accurate terms such as “proportion,” “share,” and “category,” and vary the language used to describe changes. For example, say that a proportion “rose” or “fell,” or that a figure “remained unchanged,” rather than repeating “is” and “only.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can generally follow the intended meaning. However, grammatical errors occur frequently, including in the opening phrase “In this we will discuss about,” the clause “students who speaks,” and “30% students was those.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “the percentage of no other languge is high as compared to 2000.” Punctuation spacing is inconsistent, and several sentences begin with “And,” creating a choppy effect. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete comparison structures, such as “The proportion of students speaking French fell from 15% to 10%.” Aim for a few well-controlled complex sentences alongside simple ones.

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