Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given pie charts show the proportions of the students in an england university that how many students can speak languages other than english, in 2000 and 2010.

overall, there are many languages mentioned on the charts like spanish,french and german etc which are spoken by the various british students.

In 2000, there were 10% students who could speak german only and at the same time 10% students have the ability to speak two other languages.15% of the students could speak only french language while 15% students could speak another languge. Most of the students were unable to speak any other language rather than english and their proportion was dominant to all. 20% of the students were able to speak spanish in 2000.

While on the other hand, in 2010 there was variation in their proportion.10% of the students had the ability to speak spanish and french respectively. There were ony 20% students who could speak only one language other than English.35% of the british students were able to speak English exclusively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report several accurate figures, including German and two other languages at 10% in 2000, and Spanish at 20% in 2000 and 10% in 2010. However, the response only minimally fulfils the task because the overview does not identify the main changes: the share speaking no other language rose from 30% to 35%, while Spanish fell and the “another language” and “two other languages” groups increased. The statement that 35% spoke “English exclusively” is also imprecise: the chart means they spoke no language other than English. The claim that only 20% could speak one other language in 2010 is unsupported and overlooks the French and German categories. Focus the overview on the largest groups and the key shifts, then compare the figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for 2000 and 2010. This helps the reader follow the time sequence, and phrases such as “In 2000” and “in 2010” provide some signposting. However, the overview is a list of languages rather than a summary of the main patterns, so it does not guide the reader through the comparison. The transition “While on the other hand” is awkward and redundant, and the final paragraph ends without a clear concluding comparison. Some information is also grouped in a way that obscures the chart’s categories. Organise the body around the main increases and decreases, and use concise linking phrases to show those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “proportions,” “speak,” and “ability,” and the reader can generally understand which language groups you mean. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, including “students who could speak” and “there were variation in their proportion.” Some wording does not accurately represent the chart: “English exclusively” should describe students who spoke no other language, not a separate English-speaking category. Spelling errors such as “languge” and “ony,” along with inconsistent capitalisation of language names, reduce accuracy. Use precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “fell to,” while checking spelling and choosing natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, for example, “Most of the students were unable to speak any other language rather than English and their proportion was dominant to all,” but the structure is awkward and difficult to process. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and errors in articles, sentence construction, and punctuation are frequent: “the students in an england university that how many students” is not a well-formed clause, while several sentences run directly into the next figure without a space after the full stop. The phrase “there were 10% students” also shows inaccurate grammatical framing. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding every figure, but they make the report less clear. Practise accurate comparative sentences, such as “The proportion rose from 30% to 35%.”

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