Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This diagram gives information about the percentage of students who can speak the languages other than English. Overall, in 2000 twenty percent people can speak Spanish language while in 2010 only 10 percent people can speak the Spanish or French language also. As well as, in 2000 10 percent students are able to speak the Germon and in 2010 also 10 percent people can speak this language, this remains unchanged. In addition, in 2010 fifteen percent people can speak another language while in 2010 this percentage is increased five percent. There are two another language which speak English in 2000 about 30 percent while in2010 people can speak English 35 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant categories and figures, including Spanish falling from 20% to 10% and German remaining at 10%. However, the response reports the data inaccurately in places: the 2010 figure of 10% applies separately to Spanish and French, while your wording suggests it may refer to either language. You also say “in 2010” twice when describing the rise in “another language”; the comparison should be 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010. The 30% and 35% figures represent students speaking no other language, not people speaking English. There is no clear, accurate overview of the main changes, and the response is 39 words below the required minimum. Select the key trends and describe each category precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response includes a basic sequence of comparisons and uses linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “As well as.” However, these links do not create a clear progression: the paragraph moves between Spanish, French, German, another language, and the no-other-language category without a consistent structure. Some references are difficult to follow, particularly “There are two another language,” which does not clearly connect to the chart categories. The response is also presented as one paragraph, with no distinct overview followed by organised details. Group the figures into a short overview and a body section, then compare the same categories across both years. This would make the information easier to follow and reduce confusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “speak,” “language,” and “remains unchanged,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “speak the Spanish language,” “two another language,” and “speak English” when referring to the chart’s no-other-language category. “Germon” is also misspelled, and repeated use of “people” and “can speak” makes the description less precise. Use standard data-reporting expressions such as “the proportion of students,” “accounted for,” and “rose from … to …,” while naming the categories exactly as shown. More accurate collocations would improve clarity without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few connected sentences and uses present-tense forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “twenty percent people can speak” is missing an article or possessive, and “in 2000 10 percent students are able” has the same problem. The sentence beginning “Overall” combines several comparisons in a way that makes the relationship between the figures unclear. “In addition, in 2010 fifteen percent … while in 2010 this percentage is increased five percent” also has an unclear comparison and awkward tense construction. Most sentences follow a similar simple pattern, with little accurate structural variety. Practise forming clear past-tense comparisons, for example, “The proportion speaking another language rose from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010,” and check articles and sentence boundaries.

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