Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrate the amount of other languages are spoken at one university in England by British students in addition to English between 2000 and 2010.

Overall, the highest learned language was French in 2010 and the lowest was following the 2010 is Spanish.

In the early 2000 Spanish was in the peak popularity among the students that wanted to learn their language. But as time went on it has lost its opportunity to stay on top and the amount it has lost approximately 10% from 20%. Other than that every language like two other language, another language, no other language had 5% increase in 2000. Because these country offer er best components in the job sector which boosted students advantages of applying for it.

So, the ups and downs between these countries were great but it did provide a great deal in the 10 years that follow in the graph

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies a change in Spanish and attempts an overall comparison, but it reports several key features inaccurately or unclearly. French was not the most popular language in 2010: Spanish and French were each spoken by 10% of students, while “another language” was the largest category among languages spoken (20%). The claim that Spanish fell from 20% to 10% is accurate, but the statement that “every language” increased by 5% is not: German stayed at 10%, and French fell from 15% to 10%. The overview also calls Spanish the lowest category in 2010, overlooking that it was tied with French and German. Focus on the main rises, falls and unchanged figures, and avoid unsupported explanations about employment or countries’ offerings.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and further comments, and phrases such as “Overall” and “as time went on” signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is inaccurate and the body combines data with an unrelated explanation about job opportunities. The final sentence, “the ups and downs between these countries were great,” does not clearly identify what is being compared or summarise the chart. Some linking is also awkward, as in “Other than that every language…” and “So,” at the start of the conclusion. Organise the report around the main changes, using one paragraph for the overview and a clear comparison of categories in the body.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “charts illustrate,” “popularity,” “increase,” and “approximately,” and the reader can recognise the general topic. However, word choice and collocation are often imprecise, which makes several points hard to interpret. For example, “the amount of other languages are spoken” is not a natural way to describe proportions, and “lost its opportunity to stay on top” is an unclear substitute for saying that the share declined. “The highest learned language” and “the lowest was following” also do not express the categories accurately. Aim for precise terms such as “proportion,” “share,” “category,” “rose,” and “fell,” and avoid vague phrases such as “ups and downs were great.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentences, including a time clause in “as time went on,” and the main topic is generally understandable. However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence patterns are faulty. In the opening, “the amount of other languages are spoken” has a mismatch between the singular subject and verb and an awkward clause structure. “The highest learned language was French in 2010 and the lowest was following the 2010 is Spanish” is not grammatically complete or clear. The sentence beginning “Other than that every language…” also lacks clear sentence structure, while “it has lost its opportunity” uses an unsuitable tense construction. Practise accurate comparisons with forms such as “the proportion fell from…to…” and check agreement, articles and sentence boundaries.

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