Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The infomration provided shows 2 pie charts from the year 2000 and 2010 which puts forward data showing the number of students able speaking other than english.

French and Spanish have both seen a fall in a decade of with spanish following 50% and 33.33% for french.

the only language which has retained its postion in both the same pie charts is german taking up 10% of propotion in both timeframe.

the number of students who can't speak any other languuage has increased from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010.

while the the number of students who could speak another languge expect English has increased from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010 ,indicating that students could be learning another languge alongside english

.lastly the numver of students who could speak two other languge has also increased from10% to 15% in 2010,

the date shows that almost 35% of the students are able to speak one or two other languge in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the rise in students reporting no other language (30% to 35%) and the increase in “another language” and two other languages. However, the account is only partly complete and some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. The statement that Spanish fell by “50%” is ambiguous: its share dropped from 20% to 10%, a decrease of 10 percentage points (or half), while French fell from 15% to 10%, not 33.33% unless expressed as a relative decrease. The final claim that almost 35% could speak “one or two” other languages is not clearly supported by the categories. Add a concise overview of the main pattern and report the figures precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly chronological comparison, moving from language categories in 2000 to changes by 2010, and words such as “while” and “lastly” attempt to connect points. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, so the overview and supporting details are not clearly separated. Several transitions are awkward or incomplete, such as “French and Spanish have both seen a fall in a decade of with spanish following…” and the isolated full stop before “lastly.” The sequence also shifts between categories without a clear grouping. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, and use linking phrases to show contrasts and shared trends accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increased,” “fall,” “retained,” and “proportion,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being compared. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms make the meaning less precise: “following 50%” does not clearly describe a decrease, “taking up 10% of proportion” is unnatural, and “students who could speak another language expect English” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “infomration,” “languuage,” “postion,” and “numver” are also noticeable. Learn accurate collocations for describing chart data, such as “accounted for,” “rose from,” and “fell by,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, for example “while the number of students who could speak another language… has increased,” but control is inconsistent. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are often faulty: the opening is a run-on, the sentence beginning “French and Spanish” lacks a clear grammatical construction, and “.lastly” incorrectly starts a new sentence after a full stop. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and sentence structure, as in “the only language which has retained its position… is German taking up…” and “the number… has increased… indicating that students could be learning.” Use shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled clauses. Check capitalization, commas, and full stops so each comparison forms a clear sentence.

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