Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie charts illustrates information regarding the percentage of british students at on university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english.

looking from an overall perspective, there are

At the first glance, there are deffrence of 5% in spanish and french. there former figure was 20% and the later was 15%. the maximum ratio of no other language was 30% while, the minimum was 10% of german. the two other language(15%) and another language(10%) were speak respectively.

at the rest of information, there are similar ratio of thrise of spanish, french and german which was 10%. the highest ratio of no other language was 35% and least was two other language which was 15%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant figures, including Spanish at 20% and French at 15% in 2000, and the 2010 share with no other language at 35%. However, the response is incomplete: the overview is left unfinished (“there are”), and the comparisons do not clearly summarise the main changes across both charts. Some figures are misreported: in 2000, “two other languages” was 10% and “another language” was 15%, not 15% and 10% respectively. The 2010 description also calls Spanish, French and German similar at 10%, but does not clearly distinguish the categories. The response contains 107 words, below the required 150; 14 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Add a complete overview and accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to separate the two years into paragraphs, and phrases such as “At the first glance” and “at the rest of information” signal a move between points. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the overview paragraph stops after “there are,” leaving the reader without a clear summary. The first comparison also mixes categories and figures, while “the two other language … and another language … were speak respectively” makes the relationship between the data unclear. Use a complete overview, then organise the details by year or by the largest changes, with clear references to each category. More precise linking would make the comparison easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “maximum,” and “minimum,” so the reader can recognise that the charts compare proportions. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the data hard to interpret. For example, “the two other language” is not a clear label for the chart category, and “were speak” does not express the intended idea. Spelling and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “deffrence,” “british,” and “english.” Use the chart’s category labels consistently and choose precise comparison language such as “accounted for” or “the largest proportion.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including comparisons with “while” and a relative clause in the opening sentence. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently affect clarity. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“charts illustrates”) and incorrect article use (“on university”). The unfinished sentence “looking from an overall perspective, there are” is not a complete thought. Later, “the two other language … were speak” has problems with number and verb form, while “the maximum ratio … was 30% while, the minimum was 10%” has awkward punctuation and sentence construction. Practise complete, controlled sentences and check agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms before submitting.

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