Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie chart illlustrates the how many british students was able to spoke different lanuages in UK university between 2000 and 2010.

Overall, in both year none others language spoke students covers the largest portion in group. While, another language carries the second lagest shares, french, german and spanish cotain minimal shares.

In 2000 and 2010, no others language shares carries 20% and 35% which was the largest shares in both years.In 2000, another language held 15% which later in 2010 increased by 5% and remain 20% in chart. For instance, two other languages follows the same pattern in 2000 it was 10% and 2010 it jump into 15%.

Between 2000 and 2010 german language spoke only about 10% each year.While, French and spanish shares decreased by 10% and 5% in group and remain only 10% in each group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall pattern: students with no other language form the largest group in both years, while the shares for another language and two other languages rise. Several figures are also reported accurately, including 30% and 35% for no other language, and 10% for German in both years. However, the overview is not fully reliable: “another language” is not the second-largest category in 2000, when Spanish is highest among the language categories at 20%. The comparison of French and Spanish is also unclear: Spanish falls by 10 percentage points, while French falls by 5. The response is 10 words below the required minimum, and some key comparisons are consequently underdeveloped. Include a clearer overview and report the changes precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs giving figures and comparisons. This makes the main information reasonably easy to follow. You also use time markers such as “In 2000,” “in 2010,” and “Between 2000 and 2010” to organise the data. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “While” begins a fragment-like contrast, and “For instance” does not introduce an example so much as another data point. The final sentence combines two separate trends, making it difficult to tell which decrease belongs to French and which to Spanish. Use clearer grouping and linking, and make each comparison explicit to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “portion,” “shares,” “increased,” and “decreased,” so the reader can generally understand the comparisons you intend. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, form, and spelling errors reduce precision: “largest shares,” “second lagest shares,” “lanuages,” and “cotain” are examples. Phrases such as “no others language” and “language spoke students” are also unnatural and make the categories harder to identify. Aim to use the chart labels consistently, such as “students who spoke no other language” and “the proportion of students,” and check spelling and singular/plural forms. More accurate collocations would make the description clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including contrasts with “While” and comparisons across the two years, but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “students was able to spoke” and “shares carries,” while “which later in 2010 increased by 5% and remain 20%” shifts awkwardly between tenses. There are also sentence-boundary and punctuation problems, such as the missing space after the full stop in “years.In 2000” and “year.While.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while keeping subjects, verbs, and tenses consistent.

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