Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Two charts illustrate the porpotions of british students in England at one University who where able to speak other languages in addition to English in 10 years decades between 2000 to 2010.

overall no others language is hold higest porpotions at 30% by 2020 and with 10 two others language mark last position. by 2010 no others language still in higest porpotions it had noticeable growth with 35% and spanish and France deceased and both were stand in 10%. graman language had no change at 10 %

In 2020 brithish students are able to spoke in multiple language. England have much students who are speak in English. no others language is in highest porpotions at 30% similarly spanish language had mark second higest position at 20% in contrast France and another language were i. same position with 15%. while two others language and german language remain in lowest position at 10%

in 2010 we can notice fewer change but no others language are in highest porpotions ovaer the country with 35%. others language and two others language have increased in 5% and both are become 20% and 15%. incontrast spanish and frenc had little decrease at 10 % while german had no change with 10%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important comparisons, including the rise in students reporting another language (15% to 20%) and two other languages (10% to 15%), and the fall in Spanish and French. However, the overview is weakened by repeatedly referring to 2020 rather than 2000, which makes the time frame unclear. Some figures are also misreported: in 2000, Spanish was 20%, French and another language were each 15%, and German and two other languages were each 10%; your account later assigns Spanish 20% correctly but describes the categories inconsistently. The opening also says “10 years decades,” which obscures the period. Focus on an accurate overview of the main shifts, then support it with clearly labelled figures for both years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an overview followed by separate descriptions of 2000 and 2010, and contrast markers such as “in contrast” help signal comparisons. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the years are repeatedly confused, and the first paragraph combines overview points with detailed figures without a clear structure. Several ideas are repeated, especially that “no others language” had the highest proportion. Linking phrases are sometimes used inaccurately or awkwardly, and references such as “both” do not always make clear which categories are meant. Use a concise overview, followed by one paragraph for each year or a direct comparison of the main changes, and ensure each sentence has a clear referent.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “noticeable growth,” “decrease,” and “no change,” showing some awareness of the language needed to describe data. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret: “porpotions,” “higest,” “graman,” and “ovaer” are examples. Phrases such as “hold highest proportions,” “mark second highest position,” and “increased in 5%” are not natural collocations for chart reporting. Category labels also need to be reproduced consistently, for example “no other language” and “another language.” Build a small set of accurate expressions for describing proportions, increases, decreases, and unchanged figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “overall no others language is hold higest proportions” has problems with sentence construction, verb form, and agreement; “others language and two others language have increased in 5%” also has incorrect agreement and a faulty prepositional pattern. Tense and time references are inconsistent, particularly the repeated use of “2020” for the chart years. Punctuation and capitalisation are also unreliable, with several run-on sentences and missing sentence boundaries. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms before combining ideas.

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