Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
ACCORDING TO IN THIS CHART BELOW SHOW THE PROPORTIONS OF BRITISH STUDENTS AT ONE UNIVERSITY IN ENGLAND WHO WRWE ABLE TO SPEAK OTHER LANGUAGES IN ADDITION TO ENGLISH , IN 2000 AND 2010.
*% OF BRITISH STUDENT ABLE TO SPEAK LANGUAGES OTHER THAN ENGLISH , 2000.
ACCORDING TO THIS CHART 30% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK NO OTHER LANGUAGE.
15% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK FRENCH LANGUAGE.
10% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK GERMAN LANGUAGE.
20% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK SPANISH LANGUAGE ONLY.
15% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK ANOTHER LANGUAGE.
10% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK TWO OTHER LANGUAGES.
% OF BRITISH STUDENTS ABLE TO SPEAK LANGUAGES OTHER THAN ENGLISH, 2010.
ACCOORDING TO THIS CHART 35% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK NO OTHER LANGUAGE.
10% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK FRENCH LANGUAGE.
10% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK GERMAN LANGUAGE.
10% OF BRITISH STUDENTS SPEAK SPANISH LANGUAGE.
20% OF BRITISH STUDENT SPEAK ANOTHER LANGUAGE.
15% OF BRITISH STUDENT SPEAK TWO OTHER LANGUAGES.
ACCORDING TO IN THIS CHART 2000 SPANISH AND FRENCH LANGUAGE INCREASED AND IN 2010 NO OTHER LANGUAGE, GERMAN LANGUAGE, ANOTHER LANGUAGE, TWO OTHER LANGUAGES ARE INCREASED...
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You report most of the chart figures accurately, including the rise in “No other language” from 30% to 35%, and the values for German, other languages and two other languages. However, the final comparison reverses the trend: Spanish and French decreased between 2000 and 2010, rather than increased. The response mainly lists figures and does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main changes or identify the largest category in each year. The opening repeats the task wording, while the closing statement is unclear and partly contradicts the data. To strengthen the report, summarise the overall pattern first, then compare the most important increases and decreases using accurate language.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a section for each year, and a final comparison. This makes the figures relatively easy to locate. However, the year-by-year lists are presented as separate statements, with little linking or synthesis, so the reader has to make the comparisons independently. The repeated openings “According to this chart” and the abrupt final sentence do not create a clear progression from overview to supporting details. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and the key comparisons, and connect related changes with phrases such as “by contrast” or “while.” This would make the organisation more coherent rather than simply listing data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use relevant basic terms such as “proportions,” “speak,” and “other languages,” and the category labels generally make the data understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, especially the repeated phrase “According to this chart,” and some expressions are not natural for describing chart data, such as “speak French language.” There are also spelling errors, including “WRWE” and “ACCOORDING,” which reduce accuracy. The final use of “increased” for Spanish and French is also an inaccurate word choice because both proportions fell. Build a small range of precise reporting verbs and comparison phrases, for example “accounted for,” “rose,” “declined,” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Most of the response consists of short, simple statements, and the percentages are usually placed in understandable sentence patterns. However, the opening is not a complete, well-formed sentence: “According to in this chart below show…” combines incompatible structures. There are recurring problems with articles and number agreement, as in “British student speak” and “speak French language,” and the final sentence has an unclear tense and structure: “2000 Spanish and French language increased and in 2010…” The limited range of sentence forms also makes the report sound like a list. Practise accurate comparative sentences, such as “The proportion speaking Spanish fell from 20% to 10%,” and use these alongside simple statements.
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