Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the chart we can see 20% spanish are spoken other language before 2000 and 30% french 10% german and 10% 2 other languages and 30% no other languages 10% of german, but in 2010 we can spanish and french peoples have increase the like they jump in to 40% and 15% 2 other languages and german still have the 10% , 35% have no other language so we can say in 2000 there are less proportions of british students can speak other language than english but things have changed after 2010. The percentage of able speak languages other than english have changed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several relevant categories and include some figures, such as 20% for Spanish in 2000 and 35% with no other language in 2010. However, key data are misreported: no other language was 30% in 2000, not 30% French, and Spanish and French did not rise to 40% in 2010; they were 10% each. The overview is also unclear and does not accurately summarise the main changes. The response contains 103 words, below the required 150, so the report is substantially underdeveloped. To improve, give a clear overview of the main trends, compare the two years accurately, and include the omitted categories, especially “another language” and “two other languages.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the information chronologically, moving from 2000 to 2010, and the phrase “but in 2010” signals a comparison. However, nearly all the information is compressed into one long sentence, so the reader has difficulty separating figures and understanding how they relate. The repeated use of “and” and the unclear sequence in “30% french 10% german and 10% 2 other languages and 30% no other languages” weaken progression. The final statements repeat the idea that percentages changed rather than providing a distinct summary. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and connect each comparison clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportions,” and “other language,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “spanish are spoken other language,” “peoples have increase,” and “jump in to 40%.” These choices make some comparisons difficult to interpret, while repeated use of “have” and “language” limits variety. Aim for accurate chart-reporting expressions such as “accounted for,” “the proportion fell,” and “remained unchanged.” Also use the category labels consistently, distinguishing “another language” from “two other languages,” and capitalise language names such as Spanish and French.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine information using “but” and “so,” but it relies mainly on one extended sentence and shows limited control of sentence boundaries. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in phrases such as “peoples have increase” and “german still have the 10%.” The opening, “20% spanish are spoken other language before 2000,” also has an unclear grammatical structure, making the relationship between the percentage and the category difficult to follow. Punctuation is sparse, and the final sentence repeats the same idea without a clear grammatical link to the preceding point. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences, checking subject–verb agreement and using past-tense verbs consistently for the 2000 and 2010 data.

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